STROKE YOUR OUT

STROKE -- YOUR OUT

Old men have strokes

Kids do too

Just hope and pray

It is never you

----Eagle Cruagh

Reviews

[E. A. Fielder]

Hah I found this to be a goofy little poem! I wouldn't add anything to it but I wouldn't say this is your best either.

[x]

Hmm, interesting. Why do I feel the middle is missing. This little piece seems to begin.....then suddenly ends. A stroke can be many many things. It can be a gentle soft thing or it can be a strike. Going by the wish for it to never happen, I would say this stroke is about a mark against someone. Perhaps an unjustified mark at that....by the way the writer wishes for it to never happen.....to anyone.
A good write, it makes the reader think and that's always a positive.

[Deepshikha]

Short, but sweet. I agree with CEG, and what she's saying about the poem...
'Tis rather saddening, actually.
Great write, though.

[C. Porter]

Nice. Short but meaningful, (I might be over thinking it here) I think its kind of saying something about human nature- how we secretly hope to God its never us, while we mostly publicly pray for for others, when simultaneously, you're really trying to keep yourself safe.
One thing- it should be STROKE YOU'RE OUT, not STROKE YOUR OUT.

[Simone]

Cute poem- sad though. Nice work