LONESOME

you gotta get stuff out of yor system fast

 

 

LONESOME 

 

Sometimes doncha feel like

The bottom of the pit

You know people dont understand

And you dont even fit

 

In a way ya dont even care

You know their minds are bent

By old joe the devil

Even during  lent

 

You try to make sense for them

The twisted ,  floundering few

You try to do the humble thing

Steer them to someth`n new

 

OK things are better now

I knew you`d under stand

Once you heard my problem

It worked jist like you planned

 

-----Eagle Cruagh

Reviews

[Norma M Sutton]

lol That last stanza hits my funny bone.

[Tracie Skarbo]

We all get these feelings of lonliness once and a while. I am so glad you used the energy creatively and have given us a glimpse into your world. Nicely done!

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

*nods* the best cure for that lonesome feeling is to share it..

i could totally hear the lonely prairies and howling coyotes in this.. sung by the side of a fire

[~LeeAnn~]

WOW...I like it...wondeful write

[Jennifer Marie Theresa ..]

This reminds me of a Canterbury Tale, a story being made into a poem. I really enjoyed reading it and the language used =]

[QuietPoet]

This was amazing. You discribed being alone so well. I have felt this way. Sometimes its hard to say why you are alone when you have people surrounding you, but yet your lonely. But this write explained it so well. Nicely done. I loved it.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

John as always I have yet to be disappointed by your page this is just another example of why.well done again my friend.
hugs Debby

Okay, so you've really summed up what it feels like to be lonesome. And how lots of people actually do understand what loneliness is.
You've also got a sort of whimsical twist on it.