LOVE IN A STREAM

This may be what love is all about .

LOVE IN A STREAM

In a stream of consciousness that is
When you wonder out loud about a thing
And hold it up to the light
So you can look with all your might

And ask and pry and check around
Maybe its right here on the ground
That thing you seek and want to know
It may be in her rosy glow

When she likes you and you like her
Nothings hurting and lifes a blur
The sun is warm and the dog is fed
And it`s time for you to be in bed

Then think about today in a store
When a Mommie wiped the nose
of a little child -- I froze
For there was what we all adore

It didn`t come on gossamer wings
From the supernatural kind of things
It was just in that mommies eyes
When she listened to the babies cries

When he took her hand and didn`t stare
At something hot and bare
He just led her to a chair
And made her know that he was there

So I guess it`s not all magic and stuff
It may be just when you have had enough
Of the cruel old world and all that pap
She smiles at you and love was that
----- Eagle Cruagh
 

Reviews

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

There is nothing much to say after a piece like this..it renders the reader speechless...for this piece is real.....It's like Eagle you have frozen reality (for once) in the form of words... poetry...images....feelings. This is truly a great piece of your work. I wanted you to know that.

Blessings,
Vincent

[Annie Gryphon]

"... the sun is warm and the dog is fed/ and it's time for you to be in bed ..." That is very sweet and it brings me back to the summer evenings when the sun was shining in my childrens room and i should sleep but it was like middle of the day (okay, where i live the summer nights are never really dark).
I enjoy your poem.

[EmmyLu]

Beautifully written and unexpected. I enjoyed the last stanza especially. I love the concept of love as a stream of consciousness.

[Brittany]

Gorgeous expression of feelings. Your heart laid bare for us. The word choices, phrasing, imagery were all great. I loved it. You tend to see beauty in the most common and amazing things.

[Maria.F.T]

It's nice

[Emily Rae]

When I read the title of this write I had a preconceived idea of what I might be in for; I was totally wrong. Here you have captured a dimension of love that is often overlooked and under-appreciated. The mother in me will forever cherish this. *favorite*

[Cherrie Palmer]

I loved this great job

[R.S. Wilder]

You have such a way of isolating the little things that demonstrate love and expressing it perfectly. Little everyday things that most of us over look. I love it. A beautiful piece indeed.

[SM Davis]

It didn`t come on gossamer wings
From the supernatural kind of things
It was just in that mommies eyes
When she listened to the babies cries

I cannot say much about this that has not already been said. Your work is unique, and the stanza above is well...it is. Which is enough. Very well written piece!

[deeps]

This is amazing, I really enjoyed this write alot.
Very touching and so well written.

[A.Lee]

Beautifully enchanting poem! I love the word "gossamer". I don't particularly know why, but not a lot of people use it. I like that you did. Again, an enchanting piece. Love it.