The Wolf who Cried Boy

More truth in the age of lies by the scum sucking prez-o-dent

Today, I vomited credulity

The center of seekers for honesty and breeders of certainty

To accurately apprehend with sincere authority a steel stomach for a wide spread Malday

M’lady…

you have NO f*****g idea the storm that has been summoned

There are corpses of green eyed beasts of fidelity running rings around corruption

So much trickery I need a map to navigate the narrow passages of deception

Decapitating tongues that spread hum drum trickery of duplicity and dreams

A gleam in the blood suckers

Moving s**t like southern waste truckers

I see fire in lies you incredulous mother fuckers

Good luckers

I would most certainly

converse with thee

but my vision has been blinded by a two timing greasy Jesus with the punch of back handedness

a forked tongue Lazurus

A Ceaser with no classiness,

an atrocious anarchist

Drip dried liars,

one time the two timers

In my chair of Augury I destroy the specious spires

In

your

Black Kingdom.

The 11^th commandment

"Thou shalt not F**K with truth!"

More bite marks then the boy who cried wolf

And the thing rises from the dirt and dust of graves with headstones that read

“Here lies Love, she suffered a broken heart”

“And here lies Patience, never quite knew when to start”

“And here lies Beauty, she now walks death”

“And here lies Lies, but he ain't never put to rest”

 

 

 

Reviews

[Crowley]

11th Commandment.....great stuff. The end was like driving the caddy off the cliff and not caring about hitting the ground because I have better things to think about like where I am going to oppen my pizza and wing shop in hell. Maybe the corner of Truth and M'lady. Message delivered as always, loud and clear and with a wee bit of passion and fire. Great job.

[Ashley Myers]

Sounds like a song. Like a rap song. If you dontlike rap thats not meant as an insult lol. its good.

[Zoe Jay]

This is absolutely amazing! The first line is really good, I was absolutely drawn in right from the start, it's a very powerful introduction which is so neat, and already raises so many questions, that it almost stands alone. "Vomiting credulity" is practically a metaphor for modern existence, and it also makes me think of all the many situations in life where we as a species, and as individuals, have had to compromise our beliefs, our creativity, our reputations, simply to survive. And when that happens, it doesn't come out of us with a whimper, but rather, we are suddenly spewing bile in every direction!

Very unusual use of long lines in the first section, but with very good iambic scansion which carries it along... the combination is like an assault on the senses, like a long burst of machine gun fire. This is also enhanced by your thoughtful use of sounds, jumping from sibilance to harder alliterative sounds - "with sincere authority a steel stomach for a wide spread Malday", "running rings around corruption", "decapitating tongues that spread hum drum trickery of duplicity and dreams" - it gives the poem a sort of push-pull, rocking, hard-edged feel, if that makes sense. You also use a sprinkling of profanity and capitalizations to enhance the impact and the broken choppy feel, and the off-beat structures also. The rhyme and trailed-off structure at the end of the first section is very effective and punchy to conclude your introductory point. Clearly VERY well thought out piece and very well executed.

Love the use of language, sound and structure throughout, and also, the concluding four lines are absolutely classic, epic, capable of being iconic. Brilliant ending to the poem.

"More bite marks than the boy who cried wolf" - fantastic line.

This is a really intelligent and well written poem, I can't wait to read more of your work!

[InkSlinger]

What the f**k are you talking about?.. Hahaha, just kidding, what ever you're smoking I want some.. There are only a handful of writers here that can pull off this type of honest writing, You have joined the elite few.. Bravo!

[Stacey]

WOW!!! Love the power, determination and strong message in this verse!!! Word choice and delivery is spot on...this is just a KICK A*S piece of writing. Bravo!

[Robin]

your pen has teeth , that be some vicious writing

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You don't pull any punches..brutal, brilliant..raw..your mind is wild..

[Andrew Scorah]

Dr Blues in the house of Tom Joad waxing lyrical with Woody Guthrie while chewing on the grapes of wrath. Another top ditty from the king of the altruistic word.

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

I love the brutal attitude along side the reality so clearly displayed through-out. It's said with such a savage tongue adding to the entire effect. Love it

[ali]

This is gritty and raw and also ingenious. I typically don't like swearing in poems- I swear like a sailor but reserve my poems for more complex thought- however i think you made f**k very musical- it was kind of like a punch in the face, in a good way, of course. This is definitely a performance piece- I would love to hear this read aloud.
Favorite line: "my vision has been blinded by a two timing greasy Jesus with the punch of back handedness" - you expose the hypocrisy of religion without explicitly decrying it. Really good work

[roarke]

Not since Jack Kerouac have I read a musician of words.
I see you on a jazz set crafting improvisational riffs with Dizzy, Bird, Dex, Brownie...
Everyone likes the second half here. it's good to be sure, but I'm gobsmacked by the first half.

I'm just one of the "good luckers" lucky enough to read your stuff man.