Til now. hell we don't care what people think.....I write for me right...lol? This lifted up the skirt of the quiet school girl who never did nothin' to nobody and turned her into a w***e, but that will never be written by her brother or father and her best friend was sworn to secrecy so only half the school knows. Society can't seem to speak the truth even if it see's it and it takes forty pound balls to push it in the faces of those that know its there but pretend to be unaffected. Great...thought provoking for sure.
AS I read more of your work you are to me on here the writers version of Dirty Harry, Paul Kersey of the death Wish films and the Terminator all rolled into one,you have a hard edged style that gets in your face and says read me or I will come round your house and Uzi your life away. A unique style that screams out from the page. You should be in print not in space.
People don't want the truth anymore. It is too harsh, so they live one lie at the time until everything they know are lies. Cover ups here, make believes there, makes for a world no different than one made out of lego blocks. Sad part is that those lies around us, try to bend us into what they want us to be, and never let our individual voices be heard.
I read this three times, and I might read it three more times, perhaps a bit more after that. I'm trying to find the stories and experiences in the words, see, and maybe I have, 'cause this is relatable like, we're all souls you know, broken & separated from some greater unity above below around, etc, so maybe I have experienced this in many lifetimes and it's getting worse this time around. anyway, what I'm saying specifically is that this is, what the hell, f****n amazing, my good sir, seriously. Did you just peer into my soul or somethin' ? did you pour your soul out into these poignant honesties... wish i could yell this. And speak it into existence. and yell you & I & everybody into existence. But see your words are everything in the universe, and D****T. I feel like a lunatic now, amazing what this did to me. This is spontaneous poetry, stream of consciousness, brutal emotion and truths, to the absolute highest degree, hell you surpassed the highest degree. sorry my words are an unintelligible mess. cheers.
Til now. hell we don't care what people think.....I write for me right...lol? This lifted up the skirt of the quiet school girl who never did nothin' to nobody and turned her into a w***e, but that will never be written by her brother or father and her best friend was sworn to secrecy so only half the school knows. Society can't seem to speak the truth even if it see's it and it takes forty pound balls to push it in the faces of those that know its there but pretend to be unaffected. Great...thought provoking for sure.
wooo you do it again!! you're in competition with yourself here EH! brilliant - all the dying rhymes, messages that could have been!! just brilliant - and also pretty technical though you stave away from it haha - nice little breaks to speed it up in the middle and lots of internal rhymes ;)
I'm blown away by the idea behind this piece - all the brilliant poems that might have been, flushed down the toilet of obsolescence that this century's non-events deliver on a daily basis.
reading this was like the poetry retelling of goldie locks...I read it once, too myself. Something wasn't quite right, I read it out loud... better still not quite right, unnatural, flow distorted. I screamed, pouring emotion. It was gory, it was harsh, it was awesome.
The master of rhythmical rhymes strikes again, grit grime and f*****g right. Bravo good sir.
God damn them f**king nitpickin left brain roleplayin' square peg hammerin dream crushing munchwads who have no sense of meaning and feel the need to trample every fire of inspiration and douse every flickering dream .
S**t eating fuckbag of the crapocalypse.
Dystopian Bard and general word rapist.
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