The Decider

of..me?

I am the air

I cannot be the air when I am busy being the

Breath

That beats and entreats the love between two

Liars

I travel in green fume like cheap gas station perfume that knocks the socks off

While he tries to get his rocks off with a rapist’s grip

 

I am ashamed that I have been used to educate these

Swine

When I could have used my time to suffocate these lies between these lines

I blew through the trees

I ran through the leaves

And now I believes that I spend more time as pollution in motion

Rather than ideas of positive emotion

I am

Reviews

[Gone]

This is quite a punchy piece of verse. I like it a lot.

[Crowley]

Your sense of rhythym and cadence is very good, makes reading your stuff like rapping to the beat while riding the bus uptown, earphones on, nevermind the shifty dude with the paper sack.....that could be your father. Great stuff.....I am definitely a fan.

[The Raven King]

"I travel in green fume like cheap gas station perfume that knocks the socks off
While he tries to get his rocks off with a rapist’s grip"

I'm from Chicago, the home of slam poetry and you took me back with this.

[Ruth]

You fuse so many elements and take on the part of the air beautifully here!
I love the surreality to this piece, a walk down and into the ether almost, if that makes sense lol
Great poem hon
xx

[MuSe Ampoule]

I couldn't pick out one line to quote that I loved above the others! Fantastic work!

[roarke]

Kind of like Johnny Weismuhler swingin' through the jungle. I didn't picture you as someone who spent time annoying swine.... indirectly of course.

I like the way you take the home run swings. fearless.
The words fall into place, the mind follows.

[Kerry O'Connor]

Two for two...

[OT]

very interesting piece!! really gives "food for thought" and very well written!

[Nobody.]

interesting....flows like air. :)

powerful piece....makes me question myself and look into my own impetus and actions. well written. cheers!

[Kerry O'Connor]

This poem was the decider.