Inner Me

The Inner Me Is My Biggest Enemy

I blame my lack of words.
But, my lack of words
Places blame on my lack of patience.
Picture,
Circles of figurative fingers
Striking out at each other,
Spelling out my frustrations in curvy lettering
Anger
Is my John Hancock.
Frustration is like my letter head
And,
Disappointment is the font in which I type life.
I'm
A match swimming in pools of kerosene 
Flammable 
Like the last second before bombs explode
It takes next to nothing to set me off.
Occasionally, 
I'll converse with the Inner Me,
The enemy
I curse him.
My tongue becomes an insult flamethrower
I remind him of his every fiasco. 
Like,
" How she'll never see you as more than a friend,
You'll always be the first to come in second,
You're aspirations are more like acid trips,
Or a handicapped n****s hoop dreams.
And,
Not to mention,
Your skin is darker than your own future"
And every time I scold him,
Despite my anger
Rage and furry,
The Inner Me just smiles.
He simply stares into the mirrors of my eyes
And brush his shoulders off

Reviews

[Octob3r Star]

Wonderful!

[Sukriti Suki]

This is good..I really like the imagery and the comparisons here...I was gripped from the first word till the last..Nice one.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

"You'll always be the first to come in second". Have you been reading my autobiography? :>)
This is a fantastic bit of soul searching. I hope to be able to write about the b*****d child named 'old John' that yet lives inside of me.
Your work is more than mere poetry. It is healing. Thank you for sharing this rare gift.

[arbitrary jane]

and so it ought to be.
when we can be our own rage and doubt and fear... and yet, under it all, stronger than that. unmoved. unflapped. undeterred.
shake it off, you shining remarkable one, smile that smile and rave on.

[Zack Burton]

That's an awesome work. It's got a nice, modern flow, but I'm finding it hard to grasp the meaning behind it. I think the true strong point here is the flow and the order of words.

[TheDrylands]

Wow. I think this is the most powerful of the ones I've read of yours so far (only my third).

I thought the punctuation and structure was a little confusing and inconsistent. It was hard as a reader to get into the flow particularly between "curvy lettering" and "Anger".

My favorite section:

"The Inner Me just smiles.
He simply stares in the mirrors of my eyes (GREAT IMAGE)
And brush(es) his shoulders off"

I think the last line needs a little work -- either with just grammar or rewording entirely to make it more finite/powerful!

I couldn't connect more though with the message of this internal struggle. Keep up the work!

[Sunni Davis]

I'm in constant battle with my inner me. She seems to think she knows everything and is a harsh critic of my every move. You have such an amazing way with words.