Press (P)pause

Gimme some slack

listen slack-jawed born to the floor 

Or press pause 

pause

and take four simple seconds to yourself...

You composed? 

ok...

Here we go

Here I was winning devoid-goals deported-slows to avoided horns on floor to halo sold for lotto-gold

cold was shoulders turned-to shoe-in for drugs-holed on rainy corners in holey-wet shoes grim-composed

Reminds me of my room in the suburbs looked out into a black space a throw away

A blank space was where I met my gaze in reflected glass-faced with attention issues so gaunt and so thin

oh...

So great to get past them I'd have to rewind history to where simple ends-meet

Go

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Interesting lay out as the 'prologue' makes us stop and consider the pause then you launch into the cascade of word play which seems to represent life's passage and the only way to pause is to rewind which cannot be done. So accept where you are I guess is the message.

[apennylate]

I like your take on this... Thanks, John

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Pause and Breathe...”gimme some slack”, and mercy, while I get off the carousel for a moment..to regroup, restore, reinvent...I think I get it Silente! Masterful poetry-in-constant-motion, rhythm, rhyme, beat. Silente is back and all hush to listen to his sound. I hear it and applaud. Welcome back my friend.

[apennylate]

Haha, I enjoyed the image of a frantic carousel ride... Followed by stumbling to the trash-can at the amusement park...
A moment of hushed silence for your review...
All right...
Back into it we go...
Thanks muchly for the ride, friend

[Sami Khalil]

"into a black space a throw away
A blank space was where I met my gaze in reflected glass-faced with attention issues so gaunt and so thin
oh..."

Title and poem are so unique. Hence by knowing you, you are a unique write and ever interesting in your writes.
I take the message to be about the power of pausing, of taking stock of important events in our lives. We have that ability. We can stop the wagon of time and count the passengers in our lives. We can check the map again and again not to get lost. Even in writing, is is of utmost importance to pause and think through or just do it at the end. Marvelous.

[apennylate]

Than you so much, Sami... I remember you were the first poet I ever read/saw on this site... You still remain a whole-package deal when it comes to inspiration to me, haha... Of course you would find my favorite line...

I think you have found the message brilliantly...

Marvelous to hear from you, and thanks again for the unique insights and comments... They are highly valued, friend!

Remember... Pausing is not stopping, hah

[Sami Khalil]

An honor indeed to have met and known a talented poet and friend. All rich blessings.

[apennylate]

Aye, ditto...
Richness in friendship is like being rich without the ship...

[Sami Khalil]

::::::::::)))

[Shep]

very thought provoking and very well written.

[apennylate]

Thank you, my friend

[barleygirl]

This poem contains something that I never do, but I admire it so much when I see it done well, as here. You use different pacing & pauses for good effect. Some writers throw down some oddball "getting ready to write" jargon before actually beginning whatever they are about to begin. But this isn't that. This is well-crafted & imaginative, setting a tone & imparting a little bit of "the nerves" that any artist may feel upon unleasing their creativity in an uninhibited flow. This is great rhyming & jiving & playing with word sounds while still offering a cohesive thought-stream. Hope to see more new stuff from you soon! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[apennylate]

Thank you very much for your kind words and praise. I believe you do it quite well, despite it being in a different spectrum of sounds and style presentation... If you put words into a giant block and just read them... A lot of styles are much more similar than we might think... This is an excerpt from an old piece, cut and edited from a much bigger verse of free-writing. I think proving, that if you write to have each sentence stand-alone... One flow can be consolidated into ten different ones... Never say/think/write words like "never"... When it comes to something you respect or strive for. You are master of more than you know or might think, hah. As always, you stay an inspiration. Thanks again for the fun review. Looking forward to more of your off-the-wall beast-mode writes

[barleygirl]

I'm humbled by your uplifting words! *smile*

[apennylate]

Humbled is fine... I will take humbled, haha

[The Iron Horseman]

Hmm, interesting. A good comeback line. I love the 'here we go' signalling your intent to let us know where you were and why, and how glad you are to be back to yourself. It is in some ways very indirect, but having to work for it a little makes me appreciate it more. You are back on the high road and rolling, my friend. Congrats!

[apennylate]

Thanks very much, Horse of Iron... I am looking through a lot of oooolllddddd stuff... Going to re-edit things and post lots on a few platforms... Instagram poet here I come... Rolling high, indeed!

[The Iron Horseman]

Do some more of your psychedelic imagery with the biting satire concealed within for me. I love that stuff.

[apennylate]

I have no clue what that means... I can not tell you how much of my writing gets labels I never thought of... Not that it is bad, I just never write with a "purpose or direction" I start with two words... Then just forward-reverse engineer from that point... Every time...

[apennylate]

But... I WILL TRY!!! Lol.. Gotta let me know when I am nearing those points. I am blind to it all, myself...

[The Iron Horseman]

Lol! Sure thing, I will do that.

[Chris]

I would like to see this one presented at a slam - to better gauge your intent AND take - to hear the intonations and speaker-intended rhythms. Many say they appreciate a 'modern' slant on poetry but when asked few seem to have a shared view of what was there. And I did NOT feel this one of yours was an abstract view in the least.

[apennylate]

I have been doing nothing but honing my spoken-craft... Moving into recording, actually. Setting up my own recording studio in my house atm. Most of what I write has an "out-loud" depth to it. That purely on paper, lacks the wholeness of feel one gets when "hearing" it. Rather than just a surface view, I like to think good writing is layered. Some layers mean something... Some layers are merely there to add volume and perceived depth... But I do know... That a layer cake without layers... It just cake. Thanks so much for this truly insightful comment, Chris.

[Chris]

I can hear the words behind my eyes but it's only MY voice and not yours to give intent. I look forward to listening to future posts(?).

[apennylate]

Let us hope so, a bit more to setup and get going... But 3 years now in the making on it all... I might be finally rounding a bend. Much thanks to people like you who have supported and encouraged me to find a voice to put to all this craziness. Writing is only half the coin

[Chris]

Very true about that 'coin'... you take care .

[apennylate]

Aye, you 2, budz

[Einstein Noodle]

i like the intro .. the "rap" part is a bit over loaded with reads like a word association excercise .. i think there are impactfull phrases and the abstract does emote some images for me ... but there is no clarity of intent that i perceive ... which is the danger of abstract, free verse poetry .. love the pause .. and you do warn us ... "Here we go" ;) needs steady theme
E.

[apennylate]

Thanks so much, Einstein! I agree with what you are saying... I just am a stickler for avoiding "themes" like the plague... Something i am indeed working on. This was an older piece. Appreciate the critique. We are of the same mind on it....

[Einstein Noodle]

its hard to tame a passionate explosion in creativity .. :) but worth it i think

[apennylate]

Aye, very much worth it... Besides, they are not really "laws", more like... Guidelines. aha... I could not resist

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ...................

[B-poet]

It's always interesting that we can pause or look back upon certain times in our lives that stand out the most in our minds. An interesting and expressive write.

[apennylate]

Thanks so much, B-Poet

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we can not erase where we have been or what we have done...but we can pause...take a breath...and start over...and try to live life simply the best we can.
j.

[apennylate]

Exactly, thank you for the words, Jacob.