Cotton Anxious (Edited by YumnaKay)

Cotton Anxious (Edited by YumnaKay)

A Poem by apennylate
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Focusing on locusts...

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 I focus on
locust
hocus pocus
corpus 'n' oak'us ​- ​cloak'us
forest broken 'n' soakin'
evokin' mopin' ​; ​a rope'n elope
and slope'n​...​

​I'​m open like robes
​...​hose me down​...​
​...​hopes crown​...​
I'​m bound to sound
round my pound​,​
out of drowns​,​
so air hounds​ --​ abound​.​
I'​m loud in a cloud​,​
the ground amounts​
 to an ounce of mounds
-- and now​ --​

​I'​m bound
a bat outta hell
as​ -​ ​I​ fall and
sell myself short​ ...​ at bat​.​

​I'​m a rat​ ~​ so phat
I'​m cracked at the seams
​...​it se​e​ms​...​
my means are weaned
and lean, now sleep​
and dream​​
of eating ​​reams​.​

​T​he paper bling
that screams
as the mean king 
reaps ​-​ with ease​.​

​I'​m asleep and cream-filled​ 
​a donut​ ​still​ -​- 
​I​ will be​ --​- still​.​

​M​y will is filled
with obnoxious krill​,​
that kill and kill​...​
like the pill​​
​...oxycotin​...​
N​oxious​;​ ​I'​m
cotton anxious
forgotten angst, christ​;​

it​'​s drilled into my head
a bill of dead bits
lead to lead a message, Zed 
- in a bottle -
when will the mess begin​?​
I'​m throttled, a model citizen
and ​--- ​it ends​,​

no rest for trimmed
and
~ gobbled friends​.​

© 2017 apennylate


Author's Note

apennylate
Another superb edit by YumnaKay... If you have not already, check out her writing, it is talented work...! Thanks, and have a good one, everyone!

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You two have made me so smile :) truth I can feel Yumna's mind jumping here and there taking the lead for Your own mind to jump after, and I'm pretty sure You liked so much the freedom it gave You, I feel real joy through the whole piece, where nothing else matter, the whole world doesn't matter!
Thank You both!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Light, glad to share a smile



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You two have made something pretty awesome. I really enjoyed this. xo FLB

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Appreciated, FLP... She has super editing skillz
Mesmerizing rhythm and flow Silente (and YumnaKay), truly captivating...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thanks, Mr. E
It's amazing!
You two make a great pair

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thanks! She is a superb editor
Holy crap, this really sucked me in. Great job :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Glad, and thank you, Flight
Very well written, love it

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Jay
I must say the oxycotin part was the most fun part to read as well as edit ;)
Though you wrote it as rap, it still reads dark to me, an almost gloomy touch.
This being said, I enjoyed editing it and making my frozen brain cells run a mile on how to do it lol so thank you for that, D! (:

P.S am I allowed to blush over all the exaggerated praises by you and all the reviewers here? lol jk thanks for that too (:

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Yumna, glad you enjoyed editing/reading this one... Never feel bad about blushing from pr.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

hahaha lol blushing is really not my thing :p too girly lol ;p
you're welcome, D! A pleasure .. read more
Quite an interesting read. I enjoyed the rhyming and schemes. And she does indeed sound pretty talanted. I'll most certainly go over and check her out as well.. Also please check me out too.. Thanks

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Of course, and thank you, been beyond busy lately, and under a bit of new-found stress... But if you.. read more
Phat indeed, hehe. Loved the flow.
'​M​y will is filled
with obnoxious krill​,​
that kill and kill​...​
like the pill​​
​...oxycotin​...​' ??? XD. Gosh, this was so fun to read. Truly enjoyed it!


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Truly glad, Zoe, thanks
Zoya

7 Years Ago

My pleasure!
This one was a cool read. Great editing work by Y umnaKay.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

I agree, thank you, Mitch
beautiful it is...
great one.
keep it up both of uh!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thanks, Waj
Wajiha Nayeem

7 Years Ago

pleasure....

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Added on July 28, 2017
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