King of Flawed Reason

King of Flawed Reason

A Poem by apennylate
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Imperfection...

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Festering molestation of achin'...
I'm separated by my own demons, my own feelings leapt alive with meanin'...
I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason...
For the reason I stand alone most the time...
Is I'm not feeling very grown at the time...
Like a seed with no warmth, a man outta lines, my rhymes are not good enough...
I stow it under and keep grumblin', actin' tough, mining away and wondering if it will ever be true...
Will I follow a shining path or break hollow and used...
Blasted by traces of iced gas, leaving me numb and bruised...
A rats uncle I'm stuffy and masked, you are sultry and out of grasp...
So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar...
The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars...

© 2017 apennylate


Author's Note

apennylate
Sometimes depression is crippling... Hope everyone reading this remembers they are not alone in the fight... Keep living day-to-day, and know you are valued... Have a good one

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This is so abstract, and so beautiful, just as always. I specially love the lines,

"The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars..."

Just so beautiful.

Love,
Vasilees

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

As always, a beautiful review, Vasilees, thank you, and am glad you enjoyed



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(hugs) No one depressed should ever be alone. I had a loved one depressed for five years, and I did my best to be their ray of sunlight.

This poem brought tears to my eyes. :) Brilliant job again, my friend. You've captured human emotion like a spider captures a fly.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

A ray of sunlight, I could totally see you being, Raven... Thank you so much, and I hope it was tear.. read more
Raven Moonchild

7 Years Ago

Spiders are scary little buggers, but they are helpful. lol

And yes, you are like a .. read more
"So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar..."

Indeed! And every time I read one of your poems, you have raised the bar yet again. I didn't so much read "depression" as "reflection" in this. But, I can be pretty dense for a smart woman, or so I've been told by those brave enough to tell me that!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Carol! Thank you so much, and you are spot-on, this was my reflecting upon how depression has no rea.. read more
You've done it again! You're repetition of "reason" in close proximity kind of makes me wonder whether you've gone off your game, for I don't recall any of your other work internally rhyming with the same word (this is a point where the first "reason" would normally have a rhyme but instead of one we get "reason" again). Can't quite decide whether it's part of the whole message (the first "reason" is also paired with "flawed" which makes the second have a more humorous meaning), or a mishap on your part, but regardless, this is another gem! Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Heh, def' not a mishap, Emi... Just making it a bit more relatable and easy to read... I do so very .. read more
really like how this is shaped...the rhythm is perfection...reminds me somewhat of Go West singing "I'm the king of wishful thinkin'"
and your rhymes are absolutely "good enough" better than "good enough"---

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

You are an absolute joy to read, Jacob, and an inspiration, as always... I thank you very much for t.. read more
We stand together in feeling like this then :P
I think you needn't worry, btw. Your rhymes are really kickass ;)
Oh and this was the first write of yours that I didn't have to reread to understand haha ;P
Though melancholic, your flow here is remarkable as always, Silente.

"So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar..."
Loved this line. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

lmao you're better at humour than I give you credit for ;)
And you must admit, you got this .. read more
apennylate

7 Years Ago

I admit nothing.... NOTHING....!
*Whispers*
nothing..............
RolandDee

6 Years Ago

Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail betw.. read more

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