King of Flawed Reason

King of Flawed Reason

A Poem by apennylate
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Imperfection...

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Festering molestation of achin'...
I'm separated by my own demons, my own feelings leapt alive with meanin'...
I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason...
For the reason I stand alone most the time...
Is I'm not feeling very grown at the time...
Like a seed with no warmth, a man outta lines, my rhymes are not good enough...
I stow it under and keep grumblin', actin' tough, mining away and wondering if it will ever be true...
Will I follow a shining path or break hollow and used...
Blasted by traces of iced gas, leaving me numb and bruised...
A rats uncle I'm stuffy and masked, you are sultry and out of grasp...
So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar...
The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars...

© 2017 apennylate


Author's Note

apennylate
Sometimes depression is crippling... Hope everyone reading this remembers they are not alone in the fight... Keep living day-to-day, and know you are valued... Have a good one

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This is so abstract, and so beautiful, just as always. I specially love the lines,

"The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars..."

Just so beautiful.

Love,
Vasilees

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

As always, a beautiful review, Vasilees, thank you, and am glad you enjoyed



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Ha ha you yourself wrote in the poem that my rhymes aren't good enough! Well the truth is you rhyme beautifully. Anyway I liked your poem. Depression is crippling however we must remember when everything seems dark light is always there albiet hidden. So fight back the depression as you said "So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar..."
Good job Silente. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Anjali, it means a lot to hear your kind words. Depression IS crippling... But .. read more
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With an inbox full of your requests, i thought it was time to have another crack.

And here i find a piece that is very relatable and definitely easier on the synapses.

I enjoyed your idea; struggling with depression and anxiety. And i can also see a relation of such emotional states to the effects they have on the writing process. While many poets thrive on melancholic emotions, many others find themselves artistically stunted and in such states the words cannot flow as is the norm. Was wondering if certain rhymes here, that appear slightly off beat, were intentional to relate back to your idea of 'imperfection'?

Whatever your reason, you have written a very authentic piece with a theme and emotional narrative that many of us poets can relate to. So, nicely executed work. Well Done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Erhm, well thank you, Doodley.

I try my best to limit RR's, and get to LOTS of them .. read more
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7 Years Ago

I was absent for three months. Hence, the build up of RR's. I have no problem with receiving them. W.. read more
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Sounds good, Doodley, I hope your absence found you in good health...
I was just surprised, i.. read more
I think everyone has thoughts such as this from time to time - it's because we are human, with the capacity to not only think, but over think, then think some more, our monkey minds are always exploring this avenue and that and yes even the dark ones - but in the darkness there is always a chance to find the light if we allow it X

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Aye, KWP, thanks for the time, and I agree... Am very glad you shared these inspirational words... I.. read more
Wonderful piece, I have always loved your rhymes! Sick piece really!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

D'aw, if it is not one of my favorite horror writers... Thank you, Kesha...!
Kesha

7 Years Ago

You are very welcome :D and thanks :)
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Mhm, no worries
Debilitating is depression and the factors which feed the problem, a fine write again Silente.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Aye, that they are, Andrew, thank you for visiting, friend
Self-doubt is a b*****d, my friend. Am I correct in deducing that there is a lady at the bottom of your blues? Never mind, it happens to us all at some point in our lives. The best advice I can offer you is that it is all in how you talk to yourself. Reinforce your optimism and strength of character by your internal dialogue. God, that sounds so trite, but it is actually the truth, so I guess I'll let it stand.
The poem itself is great - it might be your best yet, so there is one good thing you get from your blues, right there! :)


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

There is always a lady somewhere, I think, when men create projects of woe... A feeling and inspirat.. read more
The Iron Horseman

7 Years Ago

You are very welcome, my friend, but I assure you I am by no means wise! :)
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Wiser than I, that is for sure
great title for a poem on depression! it cuts to the quick and doesn't allow claiming irresponsibility for our feelings and thoughts processes .. so i love this line:
"I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason..." there is also a touch of humor in it .. at ones own expense .. so i like it ;)
the language is mixed ..on one hand words like "achin' ...outta ...grumblin' ...actin' ..." etc. hint (to me) of uneducated and streety .. but the rest is not so ... so i am unsure of your speakers identity
some other lines i am drawn to:
"Is I'm not feeling very grown at the time..." emotive and genuine
"Like a seed with no warmth..." kind of brilliant to me
a little bit of the manic in your second half or so ... and acceptance/resignation in last 3 lines ..
the free verse and free rhyming are fine co-partners for me ..i gravitate to that kind of thing ..the importance and sensitivity of the theme can not be ignored, in my opinion ... i venture to guess that it is a high percentage of people that experience or know someone diagnosed with depression .. an exaggerated form of feeling that we all encounter ...loved reading ..hope you do not mind my dissection ..something i don't often do ..peace and joy always
E.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Exactly, if something is flawed, most of the times... It is yourself at fault, not some outside forc.. read more
Einstein Noodle

7 Years Ago

you are very welcome .. i agree...we all feel it to one extent or another ;} one day at a time for s.. read more
If imperfection can be put in such imbibing words it doesn't look that bad coz it becomes motivation to improve. And depression seems only a way to let us know that we want to improve! Depression is a state of confusion. i feel expressing is the only way of getting over it. Good work😊✌️

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Why thank you, Krutika, I believe that as well... If it is horrible but makes you improve... How hor.. read more
Hmm..am understanding what the poem says...really a wonderful poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Heh, a surprise, I know... I actually made it understandable... Whatever is becoming of me... Thank .. read more
Priyanshi

7 Years Ago

yeah, and this poem is superb, friend.
My pleasure.
This is so abstract, and so beautiful, just as always. I specially love the lines,

"The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars..."

Just so beautiful.

Love,
Vasilees

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

As always, a beautiful review, Vasilees, thank you, and am glad you enjoyed

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