"Understanding"

Laughing... Crying...

Was I ever anything other than a row boat of understanding...

Was the load a toad that couldn't carry the weight of our laughing...

Might as well be cashed-out and standing in the rain

cause you feel no pain when trading me in for gains...

I'm alone and in vain I seek growth with a cane and rope

hope my choke can be caught before it hits the moat...

Rote slop of gropes in the dark

where was I when the mark missed its lark...

I'm hearkened to flop...

So start to stab me every which-way...

I'm heading for memory lane and it's a lame avenue of grain-free

now free but am a seed for the thousands of leeches infecting peaches... 

Molesting creatures...

Electing reavers...

So quiver and see this

hear wit betrayed

leap of faith

marmalade-aid and sated breath today...

Baked blaze and graze...

Now red-in-the-face I take a taste of fae-waste

 that pale-place when aced of graceless lace I hasten traces of pages placed... 

Intent I create craters in a maze of traitors

that bladed saber hater...

I hate her,

and savor another suitor forever suited for her labors   

Later, Gator...

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I love it. You write on deeper issues and subjects.
Understanding surely takes a leap of faith, a humble ego and empathy. Those who listen intently seek growth.
Those who seek truth, seek wisdom.
Those who seek resolutions are peace loving makers.
Your poetic boat keeps on rowing to great horizons.

[apennylate]

I wish I had a boat...
Thanks, Sami, I appreciate it very much.
I seek truth, but it seems to come parcel with A LOT of extra baggage.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! 2 carry ons allowed by the airlines. They welcome you and your baggage.

[wordman]

lot of good lines my friend,great imagery

[apennylate]

Thank you, Wordman, I appeciate that...

[barleygirl]

Since I'm a rhyme-aholic myself, always enjoyable to read one of your "rap" sounding pieces. This one seems to be more rhymy than usual, tho, & in one place it even got to be a bit distracting from the meaning: "Rote . . . and I think you might mean "slope" (instead of slop?) . . . " & for the next few lines, the rhyming was a little distracting. But overall, well done & full of playful imagery for the senses.

Your writing style is very original & that's one of the best things to be as a writer.

[apennylate]

I usually am quite firm on readers taking what they will from things, yet you ask so nicely, so... I understand the rhyming gets a bit distracting, that is my hope, and yes...

I did in fact mean "Rote slop of gropes in the dark"... "Rote" having a meaning along the lines of "learning something by repetition"...

I figured that we all have had the "slop" of sloppy and shoddy gropes in the dark... Had to learn the hard way, in most cases... So habitual fumbles in the dark can lead to rote slop, heh, at least in my mind it works...

I like leading the reader through a maze of intricate rhyming, and am glad you appreciate it, am also needing to learn how to incorporate it smoother, you are right... Thanks ever so much for the insightful and wise review., means a lot...

[barleygirl]

I thought "slope" only becuz of the sound, not the meaning . . . thanks for explaining!

[apennylate]

Hmm, yeah it was the original word that popped into my head, can not lie... But I may SLIGHTLY exaggerate when I say everything is written with abstract in mind... I try to pack as much "personal meaning" into it as I can... Slop felt it fit the theme of "betrayal and s**t", better than slope did... But as a rhyme-ah-holic... I agree with you, heh... Damn the readers for needing concrete meanings... Hah

[Ruth]

Once again, your method of wording is superb :) Brilliant...the imagery is outstanding...I particularly like "leap of faith, marmalade-aid and sated breath today." though the first line really has such impact also, I always enjoy reading your poetry :)

[apennylate]

Thank you so much, Poppy, I have always loved your style, and am blessed to have such appreciation shown to me...

[Carol Cashes]

"I hate her,
and savor another suitor forever suited for her labors
Later, Gator..."

This actually sums up the entire piece, if I'm understanding it right. You have the gift of "poetic" gab, Silente. Why aren't you famous?

[apennylate]

You DID get it right, spot-on, actually...
I... I do not know... It is not something I seek...

[Mr.Writer]

Another fast paced, creative and engaging piece of writing, filled with events and emotions to keep the reader engaged!
Well done Silente, keep it up!

[apennylate]

I do so love my intermingled emotion and events... It does indeed keep people engaged... I hope... Thank you so much, Mr. Writer...

[Mr.Writer]

No problem Silente! :)

[Joey Nizz]

Your are truly talented once you have a pen and a paper in front of you, or keyboard when it comes to this site lol

Well wrote Silente, this write is just beyond amazement.
Thanks for sharing, always happy to read your words. :)

[apennylate]

Haha... I can not write without typing to be honest... So def' a keyboard... Thank you, Joey... Means a lot to hear coming from such a wonderful writer such as yourself

[Joey Nizz]

You are most welcome buddy! and thank you for your comment! :p

[Avinash]

I would call it hard hitting catharsis of a tortured soul. It is a very strong poem.

[apennylate]

You would call it right, Avinash... Thanks for the appreciation, it is appreciated...

[Surya]

A gifted personality...I liked each and every line here.....I loved it...:)

[apennylate]

A gifted insight, Surya, thank you...

[Wajiha Nayeem]

beautifully penned....so much of meaning there was in this lovely poem..keep writing.

[apennylate]

I shall try... Thank you very much...