The words, the ambiance, the rhythm... I liked everything.
It seemed to me (at least in my mind as I read it) that the tone changed right before reading "Flames and rain", as if day turned into night and a strange deep and calm voice whispered the rest of the poem in my ears.
I loved it!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
You would be pretty correct in that tone change, Tom, and thank you so much for appreciating and tim.. read moreYou would be pretty correct in that tone change, Tom, and thank you so much for appreciating and time taken to visit... It means the world
It was definitely worth it so you're most certainly welcome. I'm looking forward to read more of you.. read moreIt was definitely worth it so you're most certainly welcome. I'm looking forward to read more of your writing in the future.
7 Years Ago
Aye, ditto, friend... Thanks you again, a pleasure
6 Years Ago
Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail betw.. read moreGee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail between his legs? I wonder why that "social writing site" turned out to be a fake effort abandoned almost immediately by it's own creator?
Eggregious hypocritical virtue signaling bully games never work out in the long run. I'm glad you realized how embarrassing your actions were/are. Maybe if you had some substance behind your populist rage you'd be worth something... but alas... you turned out to truly be intellectually vacuous.
And I'm not even going to get into the plagiarism accusations against you. (which is probably the real reason you ran away like the coward you truly are.)
If you play stupid games, you win stupid prizes. Enjoy your shame. I hope you learned something.
Regards,
-- you know who this is... I never blocked you, ya coward. Despite all of your bullshit... you are still welcome to say whatever you want to me publicly or privately. And if you had any balls, personal integrity or honor you wouldn't have had to scurry away like you did. We could of talked like men and I would have been more than happy to debate you. You chose to act like an SJW bully. You did this to yourself...
(also, stop plagiarizing other peoples work... if your that intellectually bankrupt you have to resort to that s**t... maybe writing just isn't for you)
This one is a bit of a puzzle...I'm not certain I get the meaning. However, I enjoyed the creative word play and your rhymes within the lines. As always, you are a step ahead in the creativity arena. Truly a masterful write. :) Julie
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
This one meant NOTHING, Jewel, so do not feel bad... I mean... Come on... Seals with heels...? How a.. read moreThis one meant NOTHING, Jewel, so do not feel bad... I mean... Come on... Seals with heels...? How adorable is that... Hah, thanks much
This Write takes me into a stream of never ending beautiful literary voyage. But to grasp the meaning it may take a life time to me, may be that is what your sarcastic oblivion means here..brilliant craft with beautiful rhyming and the word play within the verses is even more awesome. I am speechlessly lost in the beauty of the craft. In the end it is big big smile on my face.
Thank you Silente, for bring and sharing this word splendour...
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7 Years Ago
You are quite smart for linking the title with the silliness contained therein, hah... As long as yo.. read moreYou are quite smart for linking the title with the silliness contained therein, hah... As long as you smile, that was the whole point... Thanks much for appreciating
It's almost impossible to catch the pace, which you usually use while creating a poem... and it's require a sensible mind to understand the aura of that one... Again a magical write 😃😃
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Abhishek... This was a truly silly go-at-it, glad you enjoyed
making statements on the state of the world...the reptiles in charge with cold cold insides and thick skins that can't be penetrated, even by the needs of the people...
too many Cains....not only is this strong in content, the delivery just slips off the tongue like a crafty, nimble, quick lizard finding its way around obstacles...
excellent piece of writing.
j.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
You always amaze me at how you get better meanings from my stuff than I do sometimes... Hah, an exce.. read moreYou always amaze me at how you get better meanings from my stuff than I do sometimes... Hah, an excellent insight... Thank you very much, sir
even though i didn't get the real intent of this poem, still i consider this as a profound one. thank you...
for sharing this wonderful poem to us and
for sharing a part of your soul to the world...
Respectfully,
L.C.
:)
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
The intent is up to the reader... Whoever said we have to comply with stringent rules of writing law.. read moreThe intent is up to the reader... Whoever said we have to comply with stringent rules of writing law... Well those people can be welcome to that... But FEEL FREE to write how you want... In the WAY you want... Thanks so much
Still coming to terms with the way you enlarge your theories about life! Thi-i-i-nk this might be something to do with slaughtering animals.. or there again, might be how the roses grow overnight?! Sometimes I wonder if you're playing games not only with words/phrases but your readers. You've said you write 'free-mindedly' then- press a button and whizzz it off! So ok, hands up, didn't really understand!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Haha, maybe it is all a clever ploy meant to distract from the deep meaning behind seals having heel.. read moreHaha, maybe it is all a clever ploy meant to distract from the deep meaning behind seals having heels... I mean, so many political/social references... Or... OR.... Or... I was just giggling like mad when I imagined tiny seals dancing in tap shoes... Whatever you want it to be... Silly, or serious... Glad you enjoyed, and thanks for the dizzying review, hah...
7 Years Ago
Dizzying review was from self-sown bewilderment. Perhaps in the light of day i see some somewhat sh.. read moreDizzying review was from self-sown bewilderment. Perhaps in the light of day i see some somewhat shady characters wearing coats of rotting skin! Perhaps i should keep reading your idea of Sarcastic Oblivion til it defies itself by displaying its core!
7 Years Ago
How did I miss this response... Hah...
Rotted-skinned beings, eh... I am not sure sarcasm eve.. read moreHow did I miss this response... Hah...
Rotted-skinned beings, eh... I am not sure sarcasm ever reveals itself at the core... That might be the whole point of it, or I might just be missing the point... Pointedly...
This is the first piece of yours i've read and I enjoyed it. You have a very unique style, I look forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing, Silente.
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Traci... I appreciate that, and look forward to reading some of yours as well
This is just wow...fast - paced and with a great flow..even though I didn't understand a single thing...I loved it...
"A pill and refill the drill that will build flammable hills
With will of steel...". This line sure was cool..
Ah, you seemed to catch it was originally written to have that all as one line... Tis' one of my fav.. read moreAh, you seemed to catch it was originally written to have that all as one line... Tis' one of my fav' lines as well... Thank you very much! I will let you know a secret, though... Most of the time... I do not understand a single thing I write like this either... It is ALL word sounds and syllable rhyming... So do not feel bad, just have fun with it, hah
7 Years Ago
Just find some feelings, and attempt to put word-sounds to them Sofia, and you can write this way as.. read moreJust find some feelings, and attempt to put word-sounds to them Sofia, and you can write this way as well! Take care
7 Years Ago
It was a pleasure reading this...yeah, I thought of it as one line and it sounded so good with the f.. read moreIt was a pleasure reading this...yeah, I thought of it as one line and it sounded so good with the flow.. I'll surely take your words into consideration...but seriously, you see, I really love the rhyming...it's so awesome..looking forward to read more of ur works :)