Free-Falling Alone...

I sputter when I spit and spatter, taste of matter, waste of grave rattle

Brave hatter, mad gravity grafter, laughter disaster, gray pitter-patter 

The rains of brains after the lame-after-ache, same pass-and-take, please often make rainbows exist in travels, burned tomes are learned, unravel more paste and batter

Rags-n-Aberrations 

After the master gabber, I'm a faster blaster, a mix of traveler 'n' masker

Basket of basking travesty, carnival blur carved in mirth...

An alabaster bur

A word unheard... A song unlearned

Like bong of worth stirred and perched

I'm slurped and burped...

Stripped of dirt, the earth is burnt in crispy birth

I'm earnest in turning over every stone

unfurling my throne

no one is owed...

I'm free-falling on my own 

Reviews

[Island Hippy]

Aloha silente, old skool for days! Nui (much) kudos for your swerve and flow.
Loved this....

"An alabaster bur
A word unheard... A song unlearned
Like bong of worth stirred and perched
I'm slurped and burped...
Stripped of dirt, the earth is burnt in crispy birth"

Izzy

[apennylate]

Hii, Hippy of the Islands...! Thanks for the drop-in, appreciate it much, especially the old-school appreciation and swaggish insight...

[Cecelia A. Green]

WOW powerful! Again with the perfect rhymes!!!
Always love to read your writing!

[Jessica Lima]

I don't know why but this poem seemed very fast paced to me. I was reading it extremely fast without meaning to!

And the last stanza describes how I feel most days!

[Paul Bell]

Alabaster bur should be the phrase of the year.
That is one great ending to this wacky poem.

[apennylate]

Haha, I know right...! I was obsessed with that word for two weeks... I still am, but will not admit it...! Haha, thank you very much, it was a very wacky write...

[Paul Bell]

Though i may be borrowing it. lol

[jellycat94]

I'm free-falling through this poem, and I love it. You know how in cartoons, sometimes they'll show a character falling through the branches of trees, bouncing from one branch to another? Your poem has that sensation, but without the discomfort, haha this was so much fun! And the word play was exciting :D

[apennylate]

Lmao, what a colorful review, Jelly... This was a wonderful drop of words to an (un)comfortable splat below... Loved it, thank you very much...

[Sami Khalil]

You don't leave a stone turned to not find surprises, words to not fit meanings and music to not flow with songs. A free fall feeling of easy discovery and owed confrontation head on. Marvelous you are...:)..............

[apennylate]

You do not just leave a word unheard for the sake of the learned... Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful flow of light insight... Inspiring, you are...

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you kindly. ...::::))))

[apennylate]

Of course...

[Sami Khalil]

:)......................

[barleygirl]

Your word play really DOES feel like free-falling thru the ponderings of the mind! Your rhyming & sound combinations are fun & startling & a little bit like "rap" music but also much more unique sounding. You've used many unusual words that have interesting sounds & meanings . . . even tho I'm not getting an overall message understanding here, it's okay, cuz it's a fun read. Sometimes we just want to play with words & sounds! *smile*

[apennylate]

Exactly, Barley... Truly exactly, hah... I love your take on this whimsical free-fall of emotion... Especially the "musical" part, that is always my favorite thing to hear... Thanks so much for the time...!

[pia]

Well Doolin
You are not just good with poetry
U are also great.
I love the words used here and some how the way you structure your poems makes them fit so perfectly and make em really clear for the readers to picture every word
Love itt

[apennylate]

Well... Airline-acronym-rainbow-corgi person... You are not just great at mispronouncing my name... You are also great at structuring a well thought out review...! Loved it, thank you...

[pia]

I did that on purpose...to protect your identity !!

[apennylate]

Lol, I remember... Only a true friend would be so thoughtful... Thank you ever so much... Rainbow Corgi Guardian Extraordinaire

[pia]

Rainbow corgi doggo (pie) always there for weird ppl she meets online xD

[apennylate]

Are you implying I am weird, man... Cause if so...

[apennylate]

I def' am.

[pia]

Yes i am
Who said thats a bad thing!!!

[apennylate]

Lots and lots and lots of Who, that is who...

[pia]

Well....umm.. uuhhh *flips em off*

[apennylate]

I do not have that many fingers, but I can try... However, I am quite comfortable with my oddness... So I shall just take what they say for a grain of salt, and anyways... Is it not hip to be "different", nowadays, anyways... Hah, So I was ahead of the curve before while the curve was still a straight line... DOUBLE HAH

[pia]

AHAHA use your feet to flip em off !! Toe power
It is hip to be different
But i am a rainbow corgi so i am ahead as well boof

[apennylate]

Lmao... I concede you are the greater boof...

[pia]

Boofs and borks are always the greater ones

[pia]

You should call me senpai boof
Or more like senPie boof
Loool

[apennylate]

Oh meh gosh... Hahaha... Yesh... SenPie Boof... Purrfect

[pia]

Bamboozled at last

[apennylate]

Bambi on a booze sled dressed in lead...?

[pia]

I see your sense of humour is just as bad as mine
XD ahahahahahahah wtf

[apennylate]

HEY... It... What was bad about that... Lolol

[pia]

It was so bad it made me laugh xD its ok bad jokes and puns r cool

[George Coombs]

A great well flowing and clarly written poem, excellent work

[apennylate]

I missed you, but I appreciate the excellent and flowing review, George... Thanks ever so much...read moreI missed you, but I appreciate the excellent and flowing review, George... Thanks ever so much...

[George Coombs]

your welcome

[B-poet]

Loved the creativity and word play. Great work :)

[apennylate]

I do not know how I missed this review... But thanks so much, B-poet...

[Natasha]

I love the play on words and your choices for them. Nice poem!

[apennylate]

Thank you, Miss Ash... A very nice review, indeed...!