Separation Anxiety...

Appeasing demons...

Separation anxiety makes me uneasy, shapes me easily, queasy, I feast evilly upon the greasy lips of past travesty

Fast fallacy and i'm done, shes always falling over herself to cry for mercy and i'm stunned

Why should I give her thirsty guns to use against me

 I'm first...

 The one who shared mirth dreamily

Steaming and wheezing I refuse to give up wearily, barely surviving her Aires, I aim to breathe air when sky-diving 

Laughing and crying, i'm scared when repeating scalded lines back in tragedy

Consumed by the majesty of mages tact

I'm track-less, a puppet in repair

Fact-less, like I know only rare crafts

I give up... 

This tale is a wrap-dance, and i'm done making soul-aching payments

Ailments of whole-wrecking statements

Laments of shocking gray pavement, and I hung silently till the sun is gone

No more bereavements, believe you, me

I'm sincere when I appease demons with rum   

Reviews

[Maria]

This is a totally rad piece of writing, Silente and I applaud you once more. I love the fact that you have a way in putting down words that will go well with whatever you are wanting to talk or write about. I also have seen your collabs with Duff and the others, and those are superb as well. I have much to learn, and will continue to do so. Great writing my friend. Keep it up

[apennylate]

Why thank you, Maria, for the continued support and appreciation shown... Means the world to hear, and aye... That is all I really CAN do...Pick out words that I feel tie into the emotions of the moment... Those writers are amazing, and I would encourage you to check out everyones writing... Mind-blowing stuff...! We all have much to learn, the grave is the end of the lesson, until then... Do your best and always show-up, haha... Thanks again, and keep writing as well...!

[Maria]

Thanks I am reading alot of stuff on here, and trying to learn the basics of Haiku and Micro Poetry as well...Never heard of that until just now...but sure will. Thank you for your encouraging words

[apennylate]

Of course, I do not even now the fancy terms, myself, so do not feel bad... Hah

[Maria]

Lol. Thanks you made my day

[CMC]

That last line hits like a truck, "I'm sincere when I appease demons with rum." Turning to the bottle as an answer to the problems you end up paying for...it's wonderful.

[apennylate]

Some people like the end, some people do not... As for who likes what... Rum can fix that... Thanks so much for the heavy-hitting words...

[Lykos]

Another excellent poem, your words and the way you rhyme is unreal. Well done.

[apennylate]

Your way of praising is unreal, thanks so much, Lykos...

[Jay-LH]

This is amazing, well done

[apennylate]

Amazing review, thank you...

[Mel Jayne]

Wow. nice poem, I like the way that you laid this out its very original and taking the form in another direction. I really liked the flow and rythm of the piece but I felt as if it was lost a bit at the end, but I've read plenty of poems that do that intentionally so sorry if that is the case. I like the way that you used powerful and grotesque imagery at the start and was slightly disappointed when that did not run throughout but maybe that's just me.I really enjoyed your writing style.

[apennylate]

Oh, wow, MJ... That is a deep and thoughtful comment... I, as well, enjoy the beginnings of my poems... A lot of times the end is a quick think to, (hopefully), tie my beginning up with a nice bow... I figured it would be a relatable end to readers, more so than a gory, abstract end. Heh... But I def' agree... Could always use stronger, more evil imagery... Thanks a ton for this strong review...

[Farhan Shaikh]

Very good choice of words..enjoyed the whole poem

[apennylate]

I enjoyed your review, thanks very much...

[Natasha]

I love the play on words!

[apennylate]

I love your review...! Thanks...

[Sammie Sanchez]

Damn... this is really good. The wording choice is amazing, well done.

[apennylate]

Damn, your review is amazing... Thanks a lot...

[Sammie Sanchez]

Haha. Yeah it is

[apennylate]

Haha, the most amazing of all amazing, and don't you forget it...!

[Sammie Sanchez]

XD I won't

[apennylate]

I would hope you would not forget your own amazingness...

[Sammie Sanchez]

Mmhmm I already know I'm awesome

[apennylate]

Then the fact is cemented in certainty... I can rest in peace... Haha

[Sammie Sanchez]

Welp, you are awesome too so we are both awesome cx

[apennylate]

Oh... I am not awesome... I have transcended mere awesome... I am now... REALLY awesome!

[Sammie Sanchez]

Mhmm, I'm more amesome

[apennylate]

I will not argue that, haha

[Hebe]

Great word play, you definitely get a feeling of 'had enough' ! good job.

[apennylate]

Spot-on, Hebe, superb eye for inner-emotion... Thanks!

[Hope]

I loved the word play , Silente....
The entire flow is amazing!
As always, I loved the poem....:)
Keep sharing...

[apennylate]

I shall keep trying, thanks, Naat... As always, loved the review...

[Hope]

My pleasure.....

[Isemay]

I'm not sure if it's intentional or not, but you have a few instances of "i'm" instead of "I'm".

As much as I'd like to, I can't really give a better critique of poetry; other than to say, I like your word choices.

[apennylate]

Thanks so much, Num, I appreciate the time spent greatly... I do, actually, do that for style... I am aware that the "I" in contractions, when referring to oneself, should be capitalized no matter the placement in the sentence. Great catch, and maybe I should think about being a bit more strict on grammar...