This is a totally rad piece of writing, Silente and I applaud you once more. I love the fact that you have a way in putting down words that will go well with whatever you are wanting to talk or write about. I also have seen your collabs with Duff and the others, and those are superb as well. I have much to learn, and will continue to do so. Great writing my friend. Keep it up
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7 Years Ago
Why thank you, Maria, for the continued support and appreciation shown... Means the world to hear, a.. read moreWhy thank you, Maria, for the continued support and appreciation shown... Means the world to hear, and aye... That is all I really CAN do...Pick out words that I feel tie into the emotions of the moment... Those writers are amazing, and I would encourage you to check out everyones writing... Mind-blowing stuff...! We all have much to learn, the grave is the end of the lesson, until then... Do your best and always show-up, haha... Thanks again, and keep writing as well...!
Thanks I am reading alot of stuff on here, and trying to learn the basics of Haiku and Micro Poetry .. read moreThanks I am reading alot of stuff on here, and trying to learn the basics of Haiku and Micro Poetry as well...Never heard of that until just now...but sure will. Thank you for your encouraging words
7 Years Ago
Of course, I do not even now the fancy terms, myself, so do not feel bad... Hah
Wow, great writing. The conclusion is definitely neat and memorable, well done. My only criticism is just to tidy up some of the grammar (unless it was a conscious decision) but that's not really a big deal.
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7 Years Ago
Thanks so much, SV, I thought about it, but wanted to keep a few things grammatically incorrect, I a.. read moreThanks so much, SV, I thought about it, but wanted to keep a few things grammatically incorrect, I am never one for staying too closely within the rules... Great review, thanks again!
I feel like this is a rap, and its freakin awesome. I love it. Its fast paced, and choppy but rhymes exquisitely: and it drops off suddenly in silence "I give up -pause-" bam, "This tale is a wrap-dace," and the beat is back.
I love it. Great work, and amazing vocabulary. And anxiety is fast-paced too, the symbolism works in every aspect.
And the imagery: "Consumed by the majesty of mages tact" that line is brilliant
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7 Years Ago
Much of what I write IS a rap, heh... I love the review, and your eye is keen... As that is def' my .. read moreMuch of what I write IS a rap, heh... I love the review, and your eye is keen... As that is def' my fav' line...
You definitely write like your flowing a great song. ..if you haven't already, I'd totally consider putting it to music :)~ probably already done huh? I enjoy the style of your writing, they have energies all their own. I'll be looking at more of your art. Thanks for sharing dude!
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7 Years Ago
I would love to put everything I write to the beats that I write them too... However I lack ways of .. read moreI would love to put everything I write to the beats that I write them too... However I lack ways of doing that... So, at least I can do my best to translate flow to penned word...! You are most welcome...
7 Years Ago
Thank you for the wonderful review... i said you are welcome, but I never said thank you to begin wi.. read moreThank you for the wonderful review... i said you are welcome, but I never said thank you to begin with... Awful manners...
I'm sitting here reading this and my mind keeps saying, "SLOW DOWN!"
Maybe it's my age, but this feels rushed. Although it does feel as if it was written with anxiety, if that was what you were going for.
I read some of your other work. You have a way with words. The future looks bright for you.
Thanks for sharing.
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7 Years Ago
Everything that i write is certainly rushed, tis not your age... Heh, thank you much, SJ... I apprec.. read moreEverything that i write is certainly rushed, tis not your age... Heh, thank you much, SJ... I appreciate the insight and praise...
"Fast fallacy and i'm done, shes always falling over herself to cry for mercy and i'm stunned"
That line right there is dope. Put off by the behavior of others and their actions.
Taking your chances with the bottle is a powerful statement and that last line crushed it. Mad layers. Nice work man
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Duff, been crazy into training meh puppy... As well as just craziness going on right now... read moreThank you, Duff, been crazy into training meh puppy... As well as just craziness going on right now... I think I am going to send you that line list here soon... Glad you liked this one...
7 Years Ago
You are most welcome sir. I definitely did for sure. Haha, sounds like you have your hands full th.. read moreYou are most welcome sir. I definitely did for sure. Haha, sounds like you have your hands full then. I'm down man. Whenever you're ready.
7 Years Ago
You could also shoot me some some ideas, if you would like, maybe help me land in the same stratosph.. read moreYou could also shoot me some some ideas, if you would like, maybe help me land in the same stratosphere of genre... A bit busy, but I am carving out time, lol
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Absolutely. Let me see what I can come up with.
7 Years Ago
Good, I got pages and pages and pages... But no idea what page is worth a damn, lol
7 Years Ago
Haha! That's not a bad problem to have. I'm the complete opposite. These last few months have bee.. read moreHaha! That's not a bad problem to have. I'm the complete opposite. These last few months have been slow with the output. Super frustrating, lol.
7 Years Ago
Hmm, output is not my issue, like you said... Opposite for me... I can write w/e I want... I just do.. read moreHmm, output is not my issue, like you said... Opposite for me... I can write w/e I want... I just do not like any of it...
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That's a natural feeling to have. We're always our own toughest and harshest critic. Sometimes goo.. read moreThat's a natural feeling to have. We're always our own toughest and harshest critic. Sometimes good writing never gets read because of that exact reason.
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Agreed, but knowing it, does nothing to stop the rejection of everything, anyways... Haha
That's a true statement, lol. I'm right there with ya.
Lately it's just fragment writing. S.. read moreThat's a true statement, lol. I'm right there with ya.
Lately it's just fragment writing. Stop and go. Insanely frustrating.
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Hmm... We def' need to hang out soon, smoke... Then get that frustration dissipated, lol... Are you .. read moreHmm... We def' need to hang out soon, smoke... Then get that frustration dissipated, lol... Are you back in Denver yet...?
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That sounds like a great day right there but I don't think I'll be back when I thought. Certain log.. read moreThat sounds like a great day right there but I don't think I'll be back when I thought. Certain logistics became an issue.
Thanks so much, JN, feelings into words are all we can hope for... Apart from the actual feeling of .. read moreThanks so much, JN, feelings into words are all we can hope for... Apart from the actual feeling of the feeling... Heh...
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Yea I agree with you, sometimes we are only comfortable with the words that we write.
We let .. read moreYea I agree with you, sometimes we are only comfortable with the words that we write.
We let our feelings speak through them.
Aloha silente, another great piece. Swagger, rhyme and flow wrapped around a very powerful message. Izzy
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Aloha, IH... (I swear to you, I always say "aloha" wrong in my head...) Thanks for the drop-in, much.. read moreAloha, IH... (I swear to you, I always say "aloha" wrong in my head...) Thanks for the drop-in, much appreciated... I always love the word swagger...