Separation Anxiety...

Separation Anxiety...

A Poem by apennylate
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Appeasing demons...

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Separation anxiety makes me uneasy, shapes me easily, queasy, I feast evilly upon the greasy lips of past travesty

Fast fallacy and i'm done, shes always falling over herself to cry for mercy and i'm stunned

Why should I give her thirsty guns to use against me
 I'm first...
 The one who shared mirth dreamily

Steaming and wheezing I refuse to give up wearily, barely surviving her Aires, I aim to breathe air when sky-diving 

Laughing and crying, i'm scared when repeating scalded lines back in tragedy

Consumed by the majesty of mages tact
I'm track-less, a puppet in repair
Fact-less, like I know only rare crafts

I give up... 

This tale is a wrap-dance, and i'm done making soul-aching payments
Ailments of whole-wrecking statements

Laments of shocking gray pavement, and I hung silently till the sun is gone
No more bereavements, believe you, me

I'm sincere when I appease demons with rum   

© 2017 apennylate


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This is a totally rad piece of writing, Silente and I applaud you once more. I love the fact that you have a way in putting down words that will go well with whatever you are wanting to talk or write about. I also have seen your collabs with Duff and the others, and those are superb as well. I have much to learn, and will continue to do so. Great writing my friend. Keep it up

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Maria

7 Years Ago

Thanks I am reading alot of stuff on here, and trying to learn the basics of Haiku and Micro Poetry .. read more
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Of course, I do not even now the fancy terms, myself, so do not feel bad... Hah
Maria

7 Years Ago

Lol. Thanks you made my day



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Wow, great writing. The conclusion is definitely neat and memorable, well done. My only criticism is just to tidy up some of the grammar (unless it was a conscious decision) but that's not really a big deal.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much, SV, I thought about it, but wanted to keep a few things grammatically incorrect, I a.. read more
I feel like this is a rap, and its freakin awesome. I love it. Its fast paced, and choppy but rhymes exquisitely: and it drops off suddenly in silence "I give up -pause-" bam, "This tale is a wrap-dace," and the beat is back.

I love it. Great work, and amazing vocabulary. And anxiety is fast-paced too, the symbolism works in every aspect.

And the imagery: "Consumed by the majesty of mages tact" that line is brilliant

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Much of what I write IS a rap, heh... I love the review, and your eye is keen... As that is def' my .. read more
Beyond intelligence...U killed it and i like it

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Beyond a good review, thank you much, my friend...
This was great! Just the way it flowed and put me into the scene. It all comes so naturally. You are certainly a writer to watch! xo FLB

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

I appreciate the watchful eye, FLP. Thanks much...
You definitely write like your flowing a great song. ..if you haven't already, I'd totally consider putting it to music :)~ probably already done huh? I enjoy the style of your writing, they have energies all their own. I'll be looking at more of your art. Thanks for sharing dude!


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

I would love to put everything I write to the beats that I write them too... However I lack ways of .. read more
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the wonderful review... i said you are welcome, but I never said thank you to begin wi.. read more
I'm sitting here reading this and my mind keeps saying, "SLOW DOWN!"

Maybe it's my age, but this feels rushed. Although it does feel as if it was written with anxiety, if that was what you were going for.

I read some of your other work. You have a way with words. The future looks bright for you.

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Everything that i write is certainly rushed, tis not your age... Heh, thank you much, SJ... I apprec.. read more
"Fast fallacy and i'm done, shes always falling over herself to cry for mercy and i'm stunned"

That line right there is dope. Put off by the behavior of others and their actions.

Taking your chances with the bottle is a powerful statement and that last line crushed it. Mad layers. Nice work man


Posted 7 Years Ago


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duff

7 Years Ago

That's a true statement, lol. I'm right there with ya.
Lately it's just fragment writing. S.. read more
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Hmm... We def' need to hang out soon, smoke... Then get that frustration dissipated, lol... Are you .. read more
duff

7 Years Ago

That sounds like a great day right there but I don't think I'll be back when I thought. Certain log.. read more
This was a really good poem, powerful feelings put into words.

Nicely done Silente.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much, JN, feelings into words are all we can hope for... Apart from the actual feeling of .. read more
Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

Yea I agree with you, sometimes we are only comfortable with the words that we write.
We let .. read more
apennylate

7 Years Ago

^^ could not have said it better, myself...
rum will kill a demon ,i am told,a little coke to sweeten the taste

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Lightening the load in distaste...? Vivid and clever words, from the Wordman, himself... Thanks...
Aloha silente, another great piece. Swagger, rhyme and flow wrapped around a very powerful message. Izzy

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Aloha, IH... (I swear to you, I always say "aloha" wrong in my head...) Thanks for the drop-in, much.. read more

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Added on May 2, 2017
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