Alabaster Salamanders

Salamander masters with alabaster blasters flap wings of disaster amidst

amassed raps and rapture

Lap the lap of lapsed taps and capture the art of lost math

Arrhythmic slashed

 I get it...

 I'm crass grass gashing all who pass

Rash and unabashed

Flash of molestation

Illustrations of automatic atomization

Sodomization of aberration 

Realization that poems written for nations slip through like brass lesions 

Crack cracked up like pixie dust

Glitter lust

Hidden dance 

All dried up 

Reviews

[MaryKC]

Hi Silente, You have such an interesting way of writing. Such an incredible way with imagery. Now, I am going to admit, I do not understand some of your poetry, but I love the rhythm of your poems. You write very much like my oldest son. He too, is much smarter than I, lol, or we just have different forms of writing. He is not on this site, but I think he would like your writing as well.

[apennylate]

Hii, Mary, that is wonderful to hear about your son, will have to share a piece of his with me at some point... I will share a secret, I do not understand some of my poetry... So I think it is safe to say we are all intelligent creatures... Thanks so much for the thoughtful review...

[MaryKC]

You have a good sense of humor! Ok, sounds good to me, we are all smart!

[apennylate]

Haha, well thank you again, I am not sure how to handle the cascade of praise... But I will most def' jump on the "all are smart" boat... Except dum-dums, they are not so smart...

[MaryKC]

Nope, those suckers are pretty stupid! And yes, I know I'm not funny because both of my sons let me know all the time. Except I think I'm hilarious.

[apennylate]

Who am I to argue, since you all ready know... Haha, except I think we all find a certain hilarity within ourselves... At least that's all that counts...

[Rynn]

"Salamander masters with alabaster blasters flap wings of disaster amidst
amassed raps and rapture" - Very catching first few lines. I love the word play and the sounds that these lines utilize.

"Lap the lap of lapsed taps and capture the art of lost math" - you've obviously done an amazing job on the rhythm of this piece.

"Arrhythmic slashed
I get it...
I'm crass grass gashing all who pass
Rash and unabashed
Flash of molestation" - these lines took some thought when applying them to the overall tone of the piece. I really appreciate a quality like that in poetry.

"Illustrations of automatic atomization
Sodomization of aberration
Realization that poems written for nations slip through like brass lesions
Crack cracked up like pixie dust
Glitter lust
Hidden dance
All dried up" - again, the word choice and tempo of the piece are on point. I love the way it reads aloud.

Overall, I think you've done a fantastic job on this one, the only thing I was curious about was the formatting. Is it intentional that you've left out punctuation? If so, that's completely up to you, the author. As it is, I would say it read just fine without it seeing as the whole piece had none. I would have had more trouble if it was half punctuated. Excellent read, write on!

-Rynn

[JeremyH]

Silente, you've got the truth to tell. And you do it superbly with glaringly intimate imagery hidden behind beautiful prose. Very well done.

[apennylate]

Jeremy, thanks so much for the review... A superb flow of beautiful praise... I appreciate it greatly...

[angelina neves]

"Glitter lust / Hidden dance / All dried up"
very sad and in a way... so true...

[apennylate]

Nailed the hidden emotion behind the words, great eye, Angelina... Thank you...

[angelina neves]

It was a pleasure!

[M.E.Lyle]

I like the organization of this work. I, like the fellow before, am not quite sure what the message is, but I think it has something to do with the changing of times and methods.
Ah, what do I know, anyway?
Great work.

[apennylate]

Thanks so much, M.E... It is really the organization and sound of it all, that I focus on... Message behind the work...? Whatever the reader wishes it to be... I provide but gentle guidelines of understanding... Heh

[andrew mitchell]

clever as always silente, fine writing.

[apennylate]

Thank you, Andrew

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

The title itself is awesome! Repetition and rhyme superb. Like a rollercoaster down the rabbit hole at warp speed. Kaleidoscopic imagery. So original.Stay rash and unabashed forever!

[apennylate]

I am almost driven to write something just from the awe inspiring twists contained within your review... Thank, APH... You as well...!

[Zoya]

Well yeah, your poetry often goes over the top, but that's what makes it all the more interesting to read. You truly capture the reader's attention.
"Lap the lap of lapsed taps and capture the art of lost math"- loved this line! Great job!

[apennylate]

I was never known for going under the top, that is for sure... Thanks so much for the appreciation, and that line is amazing! I loveee it... Fantastic eye...

[Zoya]

You're welcome!

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

I have no words to describe this writing

[apennylate]

I have no words to describe this review...

[FlatLineBeauty]

The way you write is not only marvelous, but also a mystery to me. It really makes me want to know the way you think and what goes on in your mind. It makes me want to know the person behind the words... but in a way through your words, I am already starting to learn a little bit about you. I will never know or understand everything, but sometimes we just aren't meant to. That's what makes life so interesting to me. xo FLB

[apennylate]

Wow, thank you again, FlatLine... I am quite flattered... Hope you get to know more of my writing... We are never meant to understand everything, that is true...