Feels Like Forever...

Woke up this morning, feels like forever since the mourning of your name...

In shame I hid tethered to fame, a blind grain of sand against a slimy flame

I'm gaining momentum like rain, a zany feelin' bein' clean

weaning myself off the draining lifestyle, my grind paid in dreams

My time stood-still, feels like December when your clever weather was stormy

I grew gills and stormed on... 

A starship trooper in September, I ran around in embers

no space vacuum in dust, I grin and shoulder on

In my holster a wand, it sings songs about wrongs

atrocities gonged through the city, a bong hit of infinity

I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us

I know she will not see this, I'm just a bleeding creature...

So whisper feels like forever

...Leave it

Reviews

[Chrissie Muldoon]

Oh wow.... 'feels like forever since the mourning of your name...' sets us up perfectly for what you're feeling, and immediately hits as well, because all of us have--- in some way or another--- mourned someone's name and what that name means (or meant) to us.
Just brilliant.

[apennylate]

Thanks, and yes we all have, sadly.

[Paul Bell]

That's the thing with mourning. You never know when to start. Time always seems to get ahead of you.
So, no mourning, no hurt. Though that probably doesn't work either.

[apennylate]

W/e works... As long as the working is not hurting... Heh...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

several good lines...the backseat driver...she will be for the rest of your life...you will see her in that mirror...and you will hear her as she warns you of what to do and what not to do to keep the next passenger in your life happy. and that car just keeps speeding up, going through life at breakneck speed---that way the scenery doesn't eat away at us as much.

[apennylate]

Hmm, I was intrigued by this, JEC, thank you for the words... They were actually... Quite spot-on in a way...

[Chris]

Imagery with an "afterstaste"... and a lifetime's of tones to hear and live through.

[apennylate]

Thank you, Chris, I will taste the kindness in your words long after reading...

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

I rate you one of the best and saved all your poems and if you were to tell me how you write such perfect English I would be greatfull.
pleaseee... I am your number 1 fan, the first ant the last

[apennylate]

Haha, well wow, Dakalo... You humble me with your adulation... I was not aware I had any fans, much less a number one fan... I would be more than willing to help you out however I can! I love to help writers...

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

You'RE the only writer that excite me, I mean the only one, u give me power to read and study even though I am tired...I just love every sentence you write

[apennylate]

Thanks again for the stunning praise, Mr. D... You inspire me, knowing that someone loves what I write so much... Always keep studying and reading...

[Sinbulvinter]

I love your rhyme structure, it really flows nicely.
Your choice of words are so raw and powerful.
Beautiful piece here

[apennylate]

I appreciate the kindness, Miss. Sin... It is all about the flow...

[Tomás Ó C..]

Foundation for a rap lyric

[apennylate]

Hah, thanks so much, Tomas, I always use hip hop beats for my writing... Good eye!

[Zoya]

Whoa, quite complex, with a deep meaning! The moment I started reading this, I just got lost in this poem of yours. You make it seem so easy, even though I know this isn't easy to write, not for me at least.
"I know she will not see this, i'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it" loved these lines!
Thanks for sharing. I loved it!

[apennylate]

It is never "easy"... But I am incredibly happy I make it seem that way to you... Thank you, Zoe...

[Zoya]

Most welcome!

[Richard McLin]

This is a fantastic piece of poetry. I have had a rough time in the last few years trying to get back into writing poetry. This is one of the best ones I've read in some time. Wording and the structure are very well done.

[apennylate]

Richard, that means the world to me, to hear about... Regardless of the perceived "quality", there is only one important thing about writing... That is to inspire others... Your words mean so much... Thank you...

[J.P. Bristow]

Great write......I grin and shoulder on...love that line!

[apennylate]

I do as well... Because it adds a lightness to the gravity of the fires around me... Thanks, J.P...