Feels Like Forever...

Feels Like Forever...

A Poem by apennylate
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December...

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Woke up this morning, feels like forever since the mourning of your name...
In shame I hid tethered to fame, a blind grain of sand against a slimy flame
I'm gaining momentum like rain, a zany feelin' bein' clean
weaning myself off the draining lifestyle, my grind paid in dreams
My time stood-still, feels like December when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... 
A starship trooper in September, I ran around in embers
no space vacuum in dust, I grin and shoulder on
In my holster a wand, it sings songs about wrongs
atrocities gonged through the city, a bong hit of infinity
I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us
I know she will not see this, I'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it

© 2017 apennylate


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Oh wow.... 'feels like forever since the mourning of your name...' sets us up perfectly for what you're feeling, and immediately hits as well, because all of us have--- in some way or another--- mourned someone's name and what that name means (or meant) to us.
Just brilliant.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

4 Months Ago

Thanks, and yes we all have, sadly.



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"when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... "
Freakin' genius.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Not as genius as your face...! Hah, thank you, Carol
So touching. 'Leaving' is one of my most unwanted words. But sometimes things happen and people need to move on.
I love the style of writing. Great!


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Agreed, and absolutely true, thank you so much for reading
I'm more of a straightforward reader & writer, so I'm not catching your every idea here . . . still, I very much love an uninhibited write like this that throws ideas together in original ways, with original expressions, etc. Your title line is a feeling I get often, so it's relatable. There's a hint of rhyming, but not in a structured way, & this contributes to the word play . . . feels like you're having as much fun with the way words SOUND, as much as what the meaning conveys.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

I am all for the "both sides of the coin style reviewing"... Which is what you seem to be best at, B.. read more
barleygirl

7 Years Ago

I never even thought about word sounds being a big part of writing until I started on this website 1.. read more
'.. in the rust of spaces left between us'
Cunning 😁
Metaphors galore! You are amazing with them.. 👍
Loved your writeup as always 😊

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thanks very much, Krutika... It is satisfying to hear such praise from a noteworthy poetess...
Vivid descriptions and stellar metaphors. Your talent shines in every well written line. However, what I enjoy most is your unique style. Amazing writing my friend. :) Julie

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Oh wow, Jewel... Your talent for beautiful articulation is apparent in how you review... Thanks so m.. read more
That's how it is at times.
Sometimes crush or affection causes us to get attracted to others; but reexamination makes us to know our limitations.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

So very true, Rubein... Thank you for this wonderful insight...
Rubein Geterminah

7 Years Ago

You're welcome
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You are extremely talented
Saying goodbye to a person or a thought
i say so much in this piece
as it becomes so difficult to just let go
Lovely piece
a work of art

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Starz, a lovely review....
I love the way how you bind words so eloquently to form an intricate piece of poetry. This poem very acutely describes the turmoil of the poet's mind. Amazing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

I adore the way you bind words together for an interesting review...! Absolutely thank you, and spot.. read more
You express the lost of a love one in a very beautiful way...
we can fell that memories hurt...


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much, Angelina... They certainly do... But we can always leave it...!
I guess after a while few investigators will be going to enquire that how your brain handles your imagery power...I guess that's a compliment for you... awesome piece of writing... really loved it S.S. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

7 Years Ago

Haha, A.S... That is hilarious... A team of investigators are going to determine my imagery power, e.. read more
Abhishek Asthana

7 Years Ago

that won't be scientific horror story but it will be a example-setting for another young writers... .. read more
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Oh, of course, I meant no disrespect... I shall address you as Abhishek, haha...

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Added on April 7, 2017
Last Updated on October 29, 2017
Tags: Poetry, Lyrics, Romance, Love, Sad, Dark

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apennylate
apennylate

Denver, CO



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