Oh wow.... 'feels like forever since the mourning of your name...' sets us up perfectly for what you're feeling, and immediately hits as well, because all of us have--- in some way or another--- mourned someone's name and what that name means (or meant) to us.
Just brilliant.
I'm more of a straightforward reader & writer, so I'm not catching your every idea here . . . still, I very much love an uninhibited write like this that throws ideas together in original ways, with original expressions, etc. Your title line is a feeling I get often, so it's relatable. There's a hint of rhyming, but not in a structured way, & this contributes to the word play . . . feels like you're having as much fun with the way words SOUND, as much as what the meaning conveys.
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7 Years Ago
I am all for the "both sides of the coin style reviewing"... Which is what you seem to be best at, B.. read moreI am all for the "both sides of the coin style reviewing"... Which is what you seem to be best at, Barley. It gives the writer a feel for what might draw the attention of people outside his/her specific genre niche... Thank you so much for this structured and well-thought insight... You have a keen eye, for all that I really care about is flow landscape, which, yes... Focuses solely on sound blend and syllable shape... Thank you again, glad you enjoyed, despite the climb from usual rhyme...
7 Years Ago
I never even thought about word sounds being a big part of writing until I started on this website 1.. read moreI never even thought about word sounds being a big part of writing until I started on this website 18 months ago & started reading many excellent & guiding examples here! *smile*
Vivid descriptions and stellar metaphors. Your talent shines in every well written line. However, what I enjoy most is your unique style. Amazing writing my friend. :) Julie
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7 Years Ago
Oh wow, Jewel... Your talent for beautiful articulation is apparent in how you review... Thanks so m.. read moreOh wow, Jewel... Your talent for beautiful articulation is apparent in how you review... Thanks so much...
You are extremely talented
Saying goodbye to a person or a thought
i say so much in this piece
as it becomes so difficult to just let go
Lovely piece
a work of art
I love the way how you bind words so eloquently to form an intricate piece of poetry. This poem very acutely describes the turmoil of the poet's mind. Amazing!
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7 Years Ago
I adore the way you bind words together for an interesting review...! Absolutely thank you, and spot.. read moreI adore the way you bind words together for an interesting review...! Absolutely thank you, and spot-on take...
I guess after a while few investigators will be going to enquire that how your brain handles your imagery power...I guess that's a compliment for you... awesome piece of writing... really loved it S.S. :)
Haha, A.S... That is hilarious... A team of investigators are going to determine my imagery power, e.. read moreHaha, A.S... That is hilarious... A team of investigators are going to determine my imagery power, eh...? A compliment, or the beginning of a scientific horror story... Lol... Thank you, means a lot coming from such a talented writer....
7 Years Ago
that won't be scientific horror story but it will be a example-setting for another young writers... .. read morethat won't be scientific horror story but it will be a example-setting for another young writers... in order to become a dynamic author..and sir, please stop calling me A.S... I don't deserve...I know you are addressing me deliberately...I can be AA but not AS... that's a request
7 Years Ago
Oh, of course, I meant no disrespect... I shall address you as Abhishek, haha...