Oh wow.... 'feels like forever since the mourning of your name...' sets us up perfectly for what you're feeling, and immediately hits as well, because all of us have--- in some way or another--- mourned someone's name and what that name means (or meant) to us.
Just brilliant.
"I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us."
Extraordinary line one could get lost in. This is my first of your's, and feel moved to read more.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Oh, well thank you, Kelly... That means a lot coming from a writer such as yourself... I liked that .. read moreOh, well thank you, Kelly... That means a lot coming from a writer such as yourself... I liked that line as well...
There was a sad longing written here...but then again the will of a survivor coming through. That seems to be a pervading theme in your work, that you are a survivor. Here's to making it through all the tough times to better days ahead. I enjoyed the read.
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7 Years Ago
A keen eye, friend... Have certainly had some tough times... But what are tough times but hotter fir.. read moreA keen eye, friend... Have certainly had some tough times... But what are tough times but hotter fire to burn more impurities away... Thank you so much for the insight here
this is one of the most straight forward poems of yours i have read so far...i like that you have mixed your enigmatic flare with the concrete ..i feel the pain of it ...especially engaged by "...a bong hit of infinity" ..fantastic says i! and the seeing one last time in closing is sublime the way you put it ... "i'm just a bleeding creature..." is killer in the vulnerable state of your protagonist ...moves my heart out in empathy :(
E.
Thank you muchly, Noodle of Einstein... It felt that way when writing it, and am glad to know it evo.. read moreThank you muchly, Noodle of Einstein... It felt that way when writing it, and am glad to know it evoked a reaction
This is so good. I wanted to read more my friend.
"I know she will not see this, i'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it"
The above lines. Strong, logical and perfect. You made the reader feel the thoughts and the emotions. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
You are most welcome, Coyote, but thank you even more for appreciating it...