Feels Like Forever...

Feels Like Forever...

A Poem by apennylate
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December...

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Woke up this morning, feels like forever since the mourning of your name...
In shame I hid tethered to fame, a blind grain of sand against a slimy flame
I'm gaining momentum like rain, a zany feelin' bein' clean
weaning myself off the draining lifestyle, my grind paid in dreams
My time stood-still, feels like December when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... 
A starship trooper in September, I ran around in embers
no space vacuum in dust, I grin and shoulder on
In my holster a wand, it sings songs about wrongs
atrocities gonged through the city, a bong hit of infinity
I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us
I know she will not see this, I'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it

© 2017 apennylate


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Oh wow.... 'feels like forever since the mourning of your name...' sets us up perfectly for what you're feeling, and immediately hits as well, because all of us have--- in some way or another--- mourned someone's name and what that name means (or meant) to us.
Just brilliant.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

4 Months Ago

Thanks, and yes we all have, sadly.



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I'm just a bleeding creature...
ahh i really loved every part of it. why do i feel these in my veins?

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

2 Months Ago

Thank you!
I am not sure, might be a medical condition, perhaps seek care from a wizened wiza.. read more
"Woke up this morning, feels like forever since the mourning of your name..."

Why thank you, dear. I'm glad to hear that you miss me. This is Elsie...right?

Seriously, kid, stop avoiding your meds.

Posted 2 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

2 Months Ago

Dance, doggy, dance
apennylate

2 Months Ago

Bro don't take the time to personally and specifically review my poems... That shows WAY too much in.. read more
'I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us
I know she will not see this, I'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever . .Leave it

The pain of those words is.. more than painful. Your sadness says what has, does and will hit everywhere breathing - just about as it drowns in one's own tears.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

3 Months Ago

One of the most painful experiences of my young life at the time.
Thank you, EJ, thought perh.. read more
Ain't codependency a b***h?

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

3 Months Ago

Thanks for the time to review, and yes, it really is.
Was married to the idea I could sell my.. read more
Oh wow.... 'feels like forever since the mourning of your name...' sets us up perfectly for what you're feeling, and immediately hits as well, because all of us have--- in some way or another--- mourned someone's name and what that name means (or meant) to us.
Just brilliant.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

4 Months Ago

Thanks, and yes we all have, sadly.
Love the line ...'in the rust of spaces left between us." Maybe she would appreciate this if she did see this. Lovely poem.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

9 Months Ago

Thanks very much for the time spent, and maybe she would...
December is a hard time for us all... especially one in particular.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

9 Months Ago

Certainly, Thank you, Zuke
okay I wrote a song about twenty five years ago and reading this made me remember it its a bit sketchy in my sketchy bunny mind but.....
Woke up this morning,
got out of bed
evenings pleasure
drove in my head
don't know what I'm doing
maybe Ill find a job...
oh i can see now
I'll just pack my things and go
(refrain thing)
Life would be better
these things I'm sure I'll know
the Lowcale solution

okay you can go back to your regularly scheduled program :)

I say this partly of the intention of the write and partly because this reads like a song and like my song it sounds like a very happy tune but it is full of unhappy things in a sort of sardonic looney tunes melody
like my locale solution isn't one in dieting (change your lifestyle not your caloric intake!) and (change how you live not where you live and moving) to cure your ills neither is your write of blight and you scream it as such with a sublime beauty in that wonderful voice of yours. Oh yeah I love that you use mourning like me you are one sexy writer silent:) the the the the thats all the bunny has to say:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

5 Years Ago

A nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who co.. read more
Separation, break ups with loved ones, be they others, or parts of ourselves, by death or design, are eternal, or so they seem. And I thank you for giving words to the impossible emotion :-). added to my favorites.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

5 Years Ago

Another sweet comment, Mary, thank you so much...!
Glad you enjoyed it, and never impossible<.. read more
When you are mourning a break up it does seem like forever. So does December with its cold and grey (at least where I come from). Poignant piece, but we survive and eventually move on. Nicely conveyed lines and expression.

Chris

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

apennylate

5 Years Ago

Actually re-writing this one for a national song contest i HOPE to place well in...
Thanks s.. read more
Chris Shaw

5 Years Ago

Good luck with the contest!
apennylate

5 Years Ago

Tank'z you!

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apennylate
apennylate

Denver, CO



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