Greener

A short poem about envy.

Hemlocks starring at me.

Green with envy as my golden leaves land on their prickly needles.

I am here for people to see.

Beautiful and tall I stand.  The others are green with envy.

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Nakedly I stand in the breeze.

Snow passing by me and falling gently on to you.

There you are more beautiful than me.

All I can do is envy.

Author's Note

Just a poem I wrote when the seasons were changing in New England. Everything is beautiful in the right setting.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The personification in this verse rings true... the way you convey to the reader the event... and just the nature of it all... the word play is done well with the words: green with envy... I can see the change in season as you reply in the Author's note... I'm off to find another treasure of a write... not writer... Good reading you... Diary Storm... when you have more work up for view... let me know...

[Dye]

Living in New England I get the luxury of all seasons. Autumn is gorgeous, we get a ton of leaf peepers. After a snow fall, the winters here are just as stunning. Each equally beautiful in their own right. Thanks for reading.

[Angi]

Dye, I like the title and I like the metaphor, too. There is much more here than trees. I like the movement between the seasons. Our lives are like that. Some days I feel gloriously beautiful, other days I feel like an old witch. Nicely done. Angi~

[Dye]

Thank you Angi, I agree- I have plenty of days like this too.

[Bare Trees]

A good way to use a metaphor. The shifting of envy is nicely done here.

[Dye]

Thank you again for your review. It's funny that I never really knew I used so many metaphors until I joined this site. Most of my poems are more in that format. I see you have a closed account, I would have stopped by otherwise. :)

[Bare Trees]

Thanks, and welcome.

[Revery]

Excellent metaphor. I like your style Dye. A pleasure to read.

[Dye]

Happy you like my style, this is one I did years ago-- but still me :)

[annie lee]

What a great image you create with the juxtaposition of these views.

[Dye]

Thank you so much. I appreciate you stopping by to read it.

[Tom]

The seasons are each astoundingly beautiful in their own unique way and with each comes an aura all of their own! You have captivated the approaching autumn and winter so eloquently with these two descriptive verses and the jealously that can arouse from other's shortfalls!

A splendid write once more !

[Dye]

Thank you again Tom. Your review are always such a pleasure to read.

[wordwarrior]

Yes and this is very beautiful also. I just love your imagery and the metaphorical view that sits within the poem(it could be about people also).
I think there is beauty in all the seasons. I guess there are parts of each that we like and parts that we don't. I love parts of winter but don't manage the cold etc etc.
Very much enjoyed reading this. Lovely writing indeed.

[Dye]

Thank you so much for the review :)