The Forgotten Girl

A short story about the aftermath of a girl being forgotten by everyone she cares about.

She sat there paralyzed as the unthinkable happened. They had left her. She watched them walk away. Tears rolled down her cheeks. Her best friends. Gone. Grief and betrayal washed through her. Why would they leave? Did she do something wrong? Her thoughts swirled around in her head. Then it hit her. She was alone. Completely alone in this world. There was no one there for her anymore. She was forgotten.
This realization cast her into hysterics. Screaming at the top of her lungs but there was nobody around to hear. She stayed like that for hours waiting for someone, anyone, to save her from her misery. She longed for them to come back. If only she could erase the last year of everyone leaving her to dwell in her darkness. At some point she realized no one was coming. She wouldn't be saved.
Walking down the twisting road she thought of what her last goodbyes would be. Kind, gentle words for some, grief ridden and sorrowful words for others. Would anyone miss her? Doubtful. None of them cared about what happened to her anymore. Still, she cared about them. They mustn't be left without a goodbye.
Once she reached her home, she wrote letters to all of them. Everyone she cared about. She signed the last one and sealed it. All of these letters would be left on the table right in plain sight. She had no need to hide them. With a last whispered goodbye, she left everyone and all of her sorrows behind.

Author's Note

Please let me know if you find this a bit much. I would also appreciate any help with grammar and better word choice.

Reviews

[T.N. Beavers]

Hello Dy,
The way you have expressed the girl's emotions is very in depth, I could almost feel what she is going through, however, I think in some places it might be a bit melodramatic. Also, some of the sentences would sound better if they flowed together smoothly, for ex:"All of these letters would be left on the table. Right in plain sight" You could say: "All of these letters would be left on the table in plain sight." I hope these suggestions was helpful to you, keep up the good work!

[Dy]

Hullo,
Thank you for your comments. I will take them into consideration as I edit this piece and continue to write other pieces.

[Sarrow]

I wouldn't say this is a bit much at all, that's not something you need to worry about; but then I've always thought that in writing you can write what you want, whether it's too much or not. There's depth to it, and that certainly came across so that I felt sorry for this girl. It's a sad story, and enjoyable to read.

[Dy]

Thank you. I am trying to work at creating characters that people can connect to.