Godless Angel

Written in 8th grade.

Your eyes are like the sunset
soaking up my soul, 

reaching out,
don't know what it's about, 

but it's all right.

Your hair is like your laughter,
flowing like a river

down to the hearts
of everyone you meet.

Comfort those in tears
and laugh with those who aren't.

The pain you hide,
and those who've tried,
and I see it all,
and you see me.

I've never hidden a thing from you,

you see my lies,
and the tears in my eyes.

And I don't regret
a moment before 

you left my life forever. 

I don't regret a thing I've said
or haven't said or haven't done.

I just miss you,
and I want you here.

To look into my eyes and make the
pain go away,
and numb me with your ice stare
that I wish to melt away.

Well, how do you like your new life,
have you left us all behind? 

And I've told you a thousand times,
but it just won't come out right. 

When I say that I more than miss you, 

more than love you,

more than trust you,

with every little piece
of more than this heart.

And you more than get me,
more than see the truth.

I want to see your eyes
just one last time,

and tell you why I die.

I want to know you again,

and make you understand.

That you are the single most beautiful
thing that I've ever seen,

and I'm holding onto the things
that you'll never see.

You are my godless angel
and everything I dream.

Reviews

[Jack Crowley]

Wow! That is beautiful. I loved how strait-foward it was as well as how emotional it was. It brought sadness to this reader along with jealousy for how well written it is. The rhyme scheme seemed a little off, but that's ok because nobody cares about things like that. I do believe this is probably one of the best straitfoward poems I have ever read, though I haven't read many. Great work!
-Jack Crowley

[Gráinne Hayden]

wow, that's so beautiful! so captivating and full of emotion right from the start, and just flows beautiful right through to the end, i love it! ^^

[Amy]

Don't know what it's about
But it's all alright

I love these lines! They describe everything so well! The whole poem is right here, in my opinion. Nice.