Godless Angel

Written in 8th grade.

Your eyes are like the sunset
soaking up my soul, 

reaching out,
don't know what it's about, 

but it's all right.

Your hair is like your laughter,
flowing like a river

down to the hearts
of everyone you meet.

Comfort those in tears
and laugh with those who aren't.

The pain you hide,
and those who've tried,
and I see it all,
and you see me.

I've never hidden a thing from you,

you see my lies,
and the tears in my eyes.

And I don't regret
a moment before 

you left my life forever. 

I don't regret a thing I've said
or haven't said or haven't done.

I just miss you,
and I want you here.

To look into my eyes and make the
pain go away,
and numb me with your ice stare
that I wish to melt away.

Well, how do you like your new life,
have you left us all behind? 

And I've told you a thousand times,
but it just won't come out right. 

When I say that I more than miss you, 

more than love you,

more than trust you,

with every little piece
of more than this heart.

And you more than get me,
more than see the truth.

I want to see your eyes
just one last time,

and tell you why I die.

I want to know you again,

and make you understand.

That you are the single most beautiful
thing that I've ever seen,

and I'm holding onto the things
that you'll never see.

You are my godless angel
and everything I dream.

Reviews

[Jack Crowley]

Wow! That is beautiful. I loved how strait-foward it was as well as how emotional it was. It brought sadness to this reader along with jealousy for how well written it is. The rhyme scheme seemed a little off, but that's ok because nobody cares about things like that. I do believe this is probably one of the best straitfoward poems I have ever read, though I haven't read many. Great work!
-Jack Crowley

[~Wandering Soul~]

this is amazing. its so beautiful. i could feel myself drifting along with it. thankyou for sharing it. the way it just flows through, this is truly a beautiful work from you. the emotions just shine through it and at the same time they seem almost hidden or dimmed down. its just so beautiful

never stop writing for anything

-Rach

[Davia Lynn Bradley]

it's beautiful, I love the visual. hope you win!

[T. Jones]

"To look into my eyes and make the
Pain go away
And numb me with your ice stare
That I wish to melt away"

These lines stir up so many memories of my past...Actually, the whole poem does. There's a lot of emotion and longing in this poem, and you made me feel it.

Thank you for sharing this poem with us.

[Crazy Cat Man]

awwww i love this piece :D.....thank you for sharing this.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Nice language, would be complete if in rhyme...

[Angelina Smith]

WOW. This is quite the beautiful piece...congrats on having it featured in our group! Lost love, or death of a loved one.......wonderfully sculpted, the words float off the page and linger even after I was finished reading.......excellent write, my friend!!


Ninja Out
~Ange.

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

Pull. Pull. Keep pulling. A beautiful piece, full of emotion. I can tell you feel every word in this piece, and that is what this group is all about.

"With every little piece
Of more than this heart"
- you love him with more than your heart. You allude to a wholesouled love. This pushes the poem beyond the "I love you with all my heart" cliche. Well done. Tell him, blast it all! Marry and have twenty kids.

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

to see nothing but true beauty as something to behold, :P
--mim

[Katie Lynn]

I think you are my new favorite female poet on here girl... this is what I want to write like

[Madelaine]

Yes, this is beautiful. :) The first two lines really realed me in. Awesome write, and nice word choices. Thanks for entering.