Silence (Insincerely Her's)

Silence (Insincerely Her's)

A Poem by Breezie Kae
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Written in 8th grade.

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If one thing’s true,

I always have to be sure,

and I’m just not sure about you.


All I know is I feel something in your eyes,

and I wish to be closer.


I try to poor my soul out;

I would show you everything,

everything I’m dying for,

if you would care to know.


I wish to have a conversation

like the one I had with your eyes.


You’re heartlessly heartfelt,

and you truthfully lie,

and you dishonestly care,


for her.


I tell you all that doesn’t matter,

I tell you why I cry,

and I attempt to trust,

for I know your heart is well.


Your words are soothing,

and you would never smash


an already-broken butterfly.


But, maybe that isn’t enough,

I guess you just have nothing to say.


But sometimes silence says more than words,

and in your eyes there’s something more.

So in your eyes I cry tonight,

not knowing if you’d mourn.

© 2010 Breezie Kae


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Powerful words. The deep longing for the unattainable is well expressed. Bravo.

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Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I read this and felt like I got punched in the stomach. "But sometimes silence says more than words...And in this silence there's something there" really struck me.

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Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

"So in your eyes I cry tonight" -- standout line for me in a uniformly powerful piece. The emotion, the clever play on words...truly a very sophisticated write. Excellent work. :)

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Posted 17 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Wow you're sure you are 13 cause you write at a level that yeah I dont even know where to put it. I love your style here. "Heartlessly heartful" "truthfully lie" Simply amazing. You are gonna be big someday and I wanna read what you have to write

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Posted 17 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

I love that short line of "For her" in the middle, its so... powerful

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Posted 17 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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