Fortress

Escaping,

floating up farther

through puffs of condensation:

Sensation,

sending me away

up into the mountaintops

with only the birds now;

screaming.

Screaming to actually be heard

and to be given this credit

so overdue.

To stop laying on this floor,

being trampled and trampled.

To laugh from the top,

laugh.

Finding my place

alone;

building a nest

to lie there, mystified by the stars.

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This poem is pretty intense. I do like this though. I like the ending as well. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Alyssa]

Love how you ended and started the sentnce with the same word :) Creative and makes it more itense!

[October]

I really like this.
I know the feeling of wanting to escape for a while.
Well written.

[Coyote Poetry]

It would be nice to be able to escape. To escape to a fortress. I like your description. I have try to escape. Only ending on the same road. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Chaos Complex]

"Screaming to actually be heard

and to be given this credit

so overdue."

Wow, this was great. I understand the feelings from this piece very well, so it really impacted me. Love your writing, Breezie. Thanks for sharing!

[loowzerX]

I like the ending most, not just because there is the word 'stars' but because it's relaxing. great write :)