My Road, My Armor

My Road, My Armor

A Poem by drtism

For better, for worse, mine is a road less traveled.

My path, so treacherous!, Many arrows do cross it's lanes.

When aware, my road, so beautiful!, Cobbled with diamonds and gold.

Then, fletchings dim the sky, and I, attend to their number.

What once sparkled, are as thorns and I may stumble.





On the ground, lying still, my spirit, my soul, churning up inside me!

Missiles still launching, no matter!, I've donned the finest armor!

No bowman dare court my brigandine, Apollo would surely shrug,

For my road is my strength, my journey my courage!






© 2015 drtism


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"On the ground, lying still, my spirit, my soul, churning up inside me!

Missiles still launching, no matter!, I've donned the finest armor! "

very nice lines. really liked the poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


drtism

9 Years Ago

Thank you, I appreciate your kind words.
I was skeptical with the first line, only because it seemed a little overused and cliche. But I'm so glad I kept reading. Wonderful piece. My only comment is this line: "Then, fletchings dim the sky, and I, attend to their number." This would read smoother if you either remove the comma after I, or change attend to attending. I personally prefer the later, because it gives a stronger sense of time. Well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rana Adalwolfa Simon

9 Years Ago

:) Makes sense, inspiration can mean the world to a poem. I'd be half tempted to italicize those wor.. read more
drtism

9 Years Ago

That's so interesting, I just signed on yesterday. I think putting ones thoughts out there for oth.. read more
Rana Adalwolfa Simon

9 Years Ago

Agreed! :)
"No bowman dare court my brigandine, Apollo would surely shrug, / For my road is my strength, my journey my courage!" What great lines. I enjoyed this very much!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

drtism

9 Years Ago

I wrote this initially about a year ago, but rewrote it today. I think my more visceral experiences.. read more
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9 Years Ago

I believe that's how it is; as we get older and have more experiences in life we are able to see mor.. read more
drtism

9 Years Ago

I agree with you. Experience and age do not necessarily lead to enhanced perceptive insight but it .. read more
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drtism
drtism

Wilsonville, OR



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I have finally woken up after thinking I was a fully functioning human for so long. I took the traditional path for a man of my sort. Lots of college and lots of supposed successes. In nine years o.. more..

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