Reflections Upon Breathed-On Glass In a Ghostlike World

All people know - is how to be unbearable. Inspired by old films, Man Ray and Luis Bunuel.

Clockwork youth drearily passes life by with no goodbyes, as if in a nightmare.

Burnt out patchwork dreams are the ashes from the death of a flame.

Shadows appear resigned, narrow reflections of revenge in a ghostlike world.

The ballet of flowers and insects, all things come and go. 

The kiss heartlessly leaves no trace, all things wear out and die.

Cloud-like minds wearily rotted by deep rooted childhood nightmares.

Dried up love wilts like flowers, yet the stem of the heart leans to the sun again.

Vines clung inside our wrists slice through shadows and weaken for love.

Falling in and out of light, all people know is how to be unbearable to one another.

We're all mirrored shards of the moon, pouring out of mutilated clouds.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

I loved the ethereal and contemplative title, it's very atmospheric, and sets the feel from the outset. It also made me think of the landscape within a human mind - a shadowy, ghost-like world, with a suggestion of many things going on, just barely invisible behind a screen of misted glass... with thoughts coming and going, brief yet as clear as glass, arriving in the moment and then fading, as breath fades so swiftly from glass.

The poem itself continues to be strongly atmospheric, a rich descriptive poem depicting an almost Dickensian scene, detailed and tightly woven and evocative. Like Dickens, you let the subtleties of the descriptives and moods tell the story and highlight the emotions and issues, rather than explicitly bringing these things to the forefront. Very beautifully done. The language is rich and your use of rhythm, sound, and modulation from short syllable words to multi-syllable words gives the poem satisfying chunk and feel and musicality. This is sophisticated and classy writing.

[Arabdha]

I loved the title and the similies used.Your writing is lyrical and contemplative !

[Andrew Wright]

I am personally not that well versed in this particular style of imagery in the story-telling of poetry, but this impresses me all the same. Every word carries a weight that I can tell you measured just so before placing it on the page. Thank you for this experience. Also, the title in itself is amazing, I would have never thought of such a dynamically descriptive way of wording that at all.

[laughinglullaby]

I love how descriptive you are. This is a great write keep it up.

[Miss Fox]

I usually pick a favorite line or stanza to highlight and specifically compliment, but I can't do that here. Every line is just as stunning and profound as the next. Well done, and please don't ever stop writing.

[Adora.xo]

Wow. Just wow, I want to review this but for the life of me, I can't find the words (ironically enough). I really really liked this one, it was brilliant. Utterly brilliant!

~Adora

[Ruth]

This, love, is exceptional! You always hold such power in the thought process, how you display emotion, how you perceive humantiy even! We truly are sometimes ridiculous! Unbearable is an understatement lol
Perfect poem!
xx

[Daniel Atkinson]

Your descriptions are superb. This is a great piece.

[An owl on the moon]

You make your words move in and out of shadows.. they hold such emotion.. vivid transparency... Somehow, you weave beauty and pain through these subtle, tender glimpses of light and darkness...

[Ladysue]

wow your images are amazing. even though this is a sad piece, you have written this amazingly....