Stars Within Stars (A Sky Full of Scars)

Listen to your feet they're drawn to someone else's path.

Sometimes we should remind ourselves it could be worse.

Pull out your eyes and you'll see they're longing for things not there.

Feelings are like stars ashes of time leaving trails,

Constellation's of scars map life's romanticised truths.

Ignorance colours in the gaps of make believe,

Deep down there's poetry in everything.

Stars within stars - cosmic scars

(Invariably we're all mazes)

Empty relics filled with regrets.

Dreams buried in murderous land,

Thoughts of thoughts seeking escape.

Heartbeats sounding like a harmony of torture,

Drifting out to sea in the cosmos of a cluttered mind.

In our real news we're tired of ourselves,

Politics of the undead - all politics deprives.

In some real news the poor are swept away and buried,

Pages mourn for you - blank paper screams for life.  

Eyes painted away mouths written over,

Poetry scribbled on flesh with invisible tears.

History maps pain,

Murderous land hides it's dead.

Life's battles swell guts tight and clench ribs,

The gut of the universe spews out dust and stars.

 Heart Stunning 

Jun 15, 2011

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Reviews

[Arabdha]

every one of your poems makes me think so much..i read this one twice..beautiful picture..the title couldn't have been more perfect for this one..my favorite part was-
"Listen to your feet they're drawn to someone else's path.
Sometimes we should remind ourselves it could be worse.
Pull out your eyes and you'll see they're longing for things not there"..that is so true..and-
"Stars within stars - cosmic scars
(Invariably we're all mazes)
Empty relics filled with regrets"
...bravo !

[Calypso]

AMAZING! You are so gifted and have truly outdone your self here!

[freelancejouster]

this is told beautifully, the way you use descriptions to paint these beautiful, touching images is brilliant.

[Vesa Lee]

So many wonderful lines that capture the imagination!
"Heartbeats sounding like a harmony of torture" really got me though.
Enjoyable read as always. ^-^

[Kes]

"Listen to your feet they're drawn to someone else's path."

Love that line. So true.

"Poetry scribbled on flesh with invisible tears."

Thaat line got to me too.
You're a great writer.
Good stuff. :)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

History maps pain,
Murderous land hides it's dead.
Life's battles swell guts tight and clench ribs,
The gut of the universe spews out dust and stars.

this line is pure genius!! great ending!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Wonderfully written .. just beautiful though there are many woes we face.
Nice flow and rhythm .. great descriptions and your emotions very well expressed.
I do love these lines:

"Stars within stars - cosmic scars
(Invariably we're all mazes)
Empty relics filled with regrets."

Chloe

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Excellent visual word play my friend.

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

awesome title...some very striking thoughts you express here, and i like how 'Deep down there's poetry in everything'
great work,you made me think

[Lilly Negoi]

you turn a heavenly image into such a painful conclusion
"Stars within stars - cosmic scars
(Invariably we're all mazes)"
exquisite outcome!