Stars Within Stars (A Sky Full of Scars)

Listen to your feet they're drawn to someone else's path.

Sometimes we should remind ourselves it could be worse.

Pull out your eyes and you'll see they're longing for things not there.

Feelings are like stars ashes of time leaving trails,

Constellation's of scars map life's romanticised truths.

Ignorance colours in the gaps of make believe,

Deep down there's poetry in everything.

Stars within stars - cosmic scars

(Invariably we're all mazes)

Empty relics filled with regrets.

Dreams buried in murderous land,

Thoughts of thoughts seeking escape.

Heartbeats sounding like a harmony of torture,

Drifting out to sea in the cosmos of a cluttered mind.

In our real news we're tired of ourselves,

Politics of the undead - all politics deprives.

In some real news the poor are swept away and buried,

Pages mourn for you - blank paper screams for life.  

Eyes painted away mouths written over,

Poetry scribbled on flesh with invisible tears.

History maps pain,

Murderous land hides it's dead.

Life's battles swell guts tight and clench ribs,

The gut of the universe spews out dust and stars.

 Heart Stunning 

Jun 15, 2011

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Reviews

[Arabdha]

every one of your poems makes me think so much..i read this one twice..beautiful picture..the title couldn't have been more perfect for this one..my favorite part was-
"Listen to your feet they're drawn to someone else's path.
Sometimes we should remind ourselves it could be worse.
Pull out your eyes and you'll see they're longing for things not there"..that is so true..and-
"Stars within stars - cosmic scars
(Invariably we're all mazes)
Empty relics filled with regrets"
...bravo !

[trainwreck]

That first stanza just takes my breath. Amazing job. You are definitely one of the most talented writers on here. Great job.

[Stef Outsiders]

Speechless.. but I will say... beautiful piece!!

[Ruth]

Oh my! Love, this is something else! Beautiful work, in awe! lol Poetry is indeed everywhere! Everything in this life has a pattern, poetry is no different! xx

[Seshat Nidaba]

I like the width of thought and philosophical breath of this piece. "Constellation's of scars map life's romanticised truths" - great line. A poetry of deep thoughts to me is more meaningful than most other kinds, congrats.

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you write with depth of thought constantly provoking your reader to think, delve and decipher..

[Andrew Wright]

... Wonderful. My favorites has another entry.

[G. Marie"floating on an..]

Another Fabulous poem!!!! Loved it. you speak the truth!

[Erin]

Wooow.
You definitely have a talent. It really reads like a professional work. Have you ever heard a song or read a poem and you said to yourself, "There's something holding this back? It's amateur?" I read a lot of those poems and listen to a lot of those songs. Your poem is different from that -- it's like a poem read in one of those books full of poems that really good poets wrote.
Something I really liked about it was the word choice. I admire people who use amazing word choice. Your fluency and sense of rhythm was great as well.
PBP

[Kerry O'Connor]

I love the idea behind this piece: stars within stars. You have a way with words and images which speaks to the inner eye.
Pages mourn for you - blank paper screams for life.
Eyes painted away mouths written over,
Poetry scribbled on flesh with invisible tears...

[Lilly]

Some interesting and lovely images in this piece. So beautiful. I love the title also.
Great work here - glad I found this piece