The Moon Dreams of Being a Heart

When you're scared of the past and of the future and you don't feel a part of the present. Then where can you turn to?

Bleeding hearts and weeping stars

The moon wishes to be permanently hidden,

 Always looking away and not knowing who to trust.

 Why is it that things always turn out this way?

Why is it that you can't trust anyone?

Nervous reflections,

Anxious shadows.

I never know which way to turn,

I never know who to turn too.

The moon dreams of being a heart because it wishes to be more than in space. 

Scared of what's ahead,

Scared of what's passed.

Heartless people dream of space because they are nothing but space.

Nervous reflections,

Anxious shadows.

Maybe I should hide away forever with the moon.

Reviews

[Katie]

The longer lines break up the other ones, wich is obviously their intention, but I think it breaks the flow of the poem almost too much. It's almost like those three lines are telling a seperate story from the rest of the poem. Although, the two come together nicely with the last longer line. Overall I think this is a great little poem. Good work

There are no obvious technical errors, which is of course always a good thing, leaves my reviews less helpful though XD

Did you draw the picture too? Because if so, you have made my artistic side hurt :P

[abhas]

this feels... so in tune... of getting lost .... and a lingering sense of longing... in a refined way that appeals... makes me want it ... a great write overall...

[trainwreck]

Great poem! I love the idea.

[Rose Masen]

I agree with Edwards. That very line, was so complex yet so simple and beautiful Amazing job.

[L'Enfant Terrible]

This is one of the most beautiful and delicate poems I've ever read and it call get sumed in this verse: "The moon dreams of being a heart because it wishes to be more than in space."
Amazing.

[Patricia(:]

This poem was amazing. I like the closing line, 'Maybe I should hide away forever with the moon.' I also love how you connect the moon with a heart. Extremely creative. This poem was beautiful. I enjoyed reading each and every word.

[Jane Doe]

I like it it was good i like the part about heartless people are just space bcuz no heart no sould no mind no identifacation and deifference from any jane doe or john doe.
I loved it tho it was wonderful!

-abbie:)

[sentimental~ galore]

i enjoyed every word of this poem...great use of the moon, i was pulled in right in the beginning. Bleeding hearts and weeping stars...magnificent words. If only everyone knew the value in the moon, the true magic.

[KAREN]

Excellent job! Love the style and set up! The flow is great!

[misha]

great job, I love the metaphors you used. Sometimes we don't pay attention to the present because we're scared of the future and the past. nice job!