Show Me Where Am I?

I just try to hard

Of being something

Am I good at anything

Or I am just getting by

Have I so very well mastered

Being just a part of the pack

Just allowing life to pass by

And just moving on with it

Or I am just standing behind

With people running

Running fast in pursuits

Of their future scavenging

Or could I actually be

What is less likely

Be ahead of the pack

Cause I am right where I want to be

This question needs an answer

I know I only can find it

But the fact of the matter is

When will I find it

Reflecting back on my life

Its very dim and dull

Can't place where am I

Please clear this dust for me

Author's Note

Personally I think it is raw and has to mature... Please let me know what you think...

Reviews

[Britni Ashely]

I can relate to this poem very well. This is one of the best poems i have ever read and it has imagery too. Love it!! :)

[mrdionisio]

I can relate to the questions you are asking, but the poem needs a little work. A few changes I would do is completely get rid of the "or" in the fourth stanza. And get rid of "with it" at the end of the second stanza, maybe replace it. The flow of the poem needs work. Overall, great emotion and great questions. Many people could relate with this poem and that is an achievement.

[DearSweetAgony]

I agree with Tkess, its raw but it feels as if its missing something.
I enjoyed reading but perhaps you should make your stanzas longer. Other than that its a great write.

[Tkess]

I think it is raw, but raw doesn't necessarily mean bad. You could try expanding upon each stanza and the question you present and balance out the poem a little by breaking up the questions with a stanza of observation or declaration.

[An owl on the moon]

You give us questions we can ask of ourselves... pondering our purpose and our life direction. Very introspective, heart felt write.