Equilibrium

The metaphor of scuba diving inspires once again...

 

I exhaled a bit too much

let my guard down to

breath out and

rapidly began to sink,

forgetting to swallow

no longer able to

equalize the pressure

kicking hard to rise

where depth finds a measure

of comforting relief

knowing I might need to

stay out of the water.

Reviews

[Ruth]

Such comfort can mislead...something about the deep that lures me...

[David Scott]

I am heading off to a scuba trip in Thailand... I love the deep a well. On many levels.
Thank you for the comment.

[ms. barrie]

stunning write, brilliant use of metaphors, depicting
drowning in helplessness, yet determined to break thru
the surface... I enjoy your
choice of words you penned. Thank you for sharing (:
~ x - barrie

[David Scott]

Thank you for the comment Barrie. Always happy to share. :)

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome, Mr. Scott. -- will 're visit your ink...
after I try to squeeze out a poem...happy writings (:

[sheandherself]

I love this. Great piece.

[David Scott]

Thank you very much. Myself and I will stop by to read one of your writes soon. :)

[Zugzwang]

Intriguing metaphor.
Water can be so benign, but also so treacherous.
Luckily I was gifted with large eustachian tubes...I loved to descend very rapidly.

[David Scott]

Thank you kindly for the comment and for reading.

[...]

Impossible to stay out of the water when there is so much of it in you :) Float weightless in it's realm and marvel at all the life within.

[David Scott]

I think this might be the most perceptive response I have ever had to a poem...
Thank you...

[Willard Wells]

I have not done a dive in many years, but still have a DUI Dry suite and all the other s**t. Nice work on finding that happy spot. Just to float in space and time as all around passing by as bubbles rise. Oh better check the air. Thanks for the memories.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the comments Will. I have found scuba to be a great experience.

[A hare off]

Very nice David. I found myself holding my breath halfway through this.

[David Scott]

Never hold your breath... First rule of diving; honestly. Ha.
Thank you for reading.

[DrD]

I remember my first dives and related well, David. Keep at it, it's a new and marvelous world down there. In the meantime, another delightful point of view about a typical event. Well done.

[David Scott]

I love scuba! It rocks!!! I have had no issues whatsoever under the water. Other than a little motion sickness, and this goes away under water after a little "burp" or two...
My son is an avid diver, so I decided to learn. Wish I had done it twenty years ago. I have my advanced open water now.
Thanks for reading.

[David Scott]

Diving the "waters" of social interactions is another story... I suck at it... My head is killing me on this exploration of human contact.

[Brittany Bostic]

Drowning is such a terrible and strange experience. I really like the last two lines, "knowing I might need to stay out of the water." That shows that our abilities can only go so far.

[David Scott]

Well, I have just learned to scuba dive. It is imperative to equalize your ears and sinuses when descending to the pressure of deeper waters... So, even if one is alive and well, the pain can be excruciating. Not so much about drowning as it is about finding a painless equilibrium to enjoy the experience of being in the magical world of... (you name it).
Thank you kindly for reading and reviewing.

[softlyfall]

Drowning is an experience of rapture, once the fight is over. Produces a unique near death experience.

[David Scott]

Maybe... There seems to be a romance around this topic. I do not fantasize on pain or near death. Reality brings me enough. I seek the light; the open air and blue sky. Alas, I cannot fly.
Thank you for the comment.

[softlyfall]

I dont muse on near death.
I died.
Twice, technically. So I have some experiential understanding.

[David Scott]

I am so sorry... Glad it was almost and you are still with us. :)
Yes, not musing, but understanding is a good place to be I think.