Real Life Geometrics

I gave my circle of being whole
becoming a sphere of our completeness,
until it began to unravel into a downward spiral
twisting into a love triangle of misdirection...
then all the angles disconnected
leaving us nothing more than tangents;
unloved souls stretched...
on linear paths to nowhere ~

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

I saw cartoon matchstick men and woman unravel before my very eyes as I read these words. From circle, sphere, spiral, to broken shapes and lines break and fade away, like a direct hit on the old asteroids arcade game. While seeing this I saw a life, or lives unravel as they too fade from each other.
Beautifully stated.

[David Scott]

I like where you went with this review. Thank you.

[alifeacoustic]

You are very welcome.

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And who gave you permission to be clever AND creative? Ah, it must of been THE BOSS...and sooo this is, all of this is, kudos for listening, Quick Study :-)

[David Scott]

Thank you for the comment Lynn. I do love your thoughts.

[andrew mitchell]

Fantastic imagery and flow of geometrics on life's paths and loves. Very clever! Brilliant! I wish I thought of this beauty, David!

[David Scott]

Thank you Andrew. It was a thought I had during a review of a poem last week about a love triangle...

[andrew mitchell]

You made this poem look so easy like off the cuff. Loved the whole concept!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, nice metaphor carried out here...terrific, stuff, David...love the last line especially...
as much as i like the poem...the only drawback is that it reminded me of how awful i was in geometry and trigonometry...what a struggle

well makes sense because love can be a real struggle when it becomes one-sided, when one disconnects.

j.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the review and your kind compliment. A little "fog" is always welcomed on a winter's night.