Real Life Geometrics

I gave my circle of being whole
becoming a sphere of our completeness,
until it began to unravel into a downward spiral
twisting into a love triangle of misdirection...
then all the angles disconnected
leaving us nothing more than tangents;
unloved souls stretched...
on linear paths to nowhere ~

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I really enjoy the way you've woven all these geometric terms into your love poem without it coming across as one bit "manufactured" for the purpose of illustrating your title message. Instead, the writing flows both logically & meaningfully, showing us the various stages of knowing & loving another. Very clever & original.

[David Scott]

Thank you very much for the kind comment. I think I can get a little pretentious at times... ha. So glad this bit of thought conveyed logic and meaning, (two of my goals in all things). ;)

[sheandherself]

The name of this attached me just as I read it, as I love mathematics.
This is just so beautiful, I'm speechless. Your talent is incredible.

[David Scott]

Thank you very much for your enthusiastic review. I will stop by and return the favor soon.

[ms. barrie]

i love how you intertwined mathematics into this write...your words painted a geometrical
portrait of brilliance.
thank you for sharing
~ xx - barrie

[David Scott]

Thank you for reading. Just being a little silly. 😀

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome...was a pleasure to read...and to quote
Mr. Plant "does anybody remember laughter?" lol

[Einstein Noodle]

ahaha! great tribute to mathematics ..love it! and apt personifications ... especially appreciate your use of tangents and linear paths .. makes me want to get out my compass and protractor ..and watch those lines spinning off the spheres :)
E.

[David Scott]

Thank you. Sorry I ran off... Flying today. Heading now to Tokyo, then on to Thailand. Will be back to review your work soon. Between flights now.
This one should appeal to your pen name. Ha.
Love your Avatar. We just lost our boxer... She is missed and loved dearly.
Until...

[Einstein Noodle]

sorry for your loss! they are relatives ... descended from the same great Pyrenees i understand .. you are a jet setter eh!? off to here and there and beyond .. :) be careful my friend!
E.

[pb]

u know what i like most on ur poems? You do math with your words and in the end when u put them there it's like you find a solution.. I like that.. I've learnt some of words that I didn't know were existing in English..Thank you for bringin it here.

pb

[David Scott]

I am smiling... Funny observation. I think you might be on to something. It is not intentional however. Just a pattern of how I think.
Thank you very much for reading and I loved your comment.

[Lydia Shutter]

Love the mathematical references in this one! When a circle is just two and suddenly a third is interjected, the triangle is never as warm and fuzzy as the circle was. Indeed, it begins a path to nowhere. Very good metaphor in this one. Lydi**

[David Scott]

It seems so obvious when you go the math... Ha.
Thank you Lydi.

[Rachael Lea]

This is really cool, very creative, and it flows in a neat way to almost as if you can feel it spinning into completeness and spiraling out of control to where you are stretching and unable to bring it all back together. Very neat!

[David Scott]

Thank you very much for all of the reviews. You are kind to give your time and thought.

[Rachael Lea]

it is nothing really I enjoy looking at what other writers do with their work. they often inspire me with my new writings without even meaning to, granted today I am slightly too tired to be inspired but I do intend to check out your other poems as my day progresses and I drink more caffeine :) I do enjoy your style and technique you are a fun read so keep writing like that and Ill keep reviewing :)

[David Scott]

I am humbly honored. Thank you again.

[A hare off]

Now I wish I would have paid attention in geometry class. Simple math was hard enough but I did learn that one plus one does sometimes equal three and often when it does the final sum is one. Wow, that felt like algebra. Nah, coulbn't be. I liked how you kept this in sync with rthe theme David.

[softlyfall]

Well Anthony, I am math impaired but that never stopped me from relishing the idea of equations and measurements of....stuff in the universe ((grin))
It's all so foreign to my personal perspective, which is very fluid.
Lucky for is, we have the left brain poets here.

[A hare off]

As opposed to me, I'm a hare brain you know. :)

[Corset]

From what I hear love is a long road that always ends back up where it belongs and along the way you can spit or pick flowers, or fold in upon yourself and time travel but if is genuine, the road ends where it begins :)

[David Scott]

Maybe Corset... maybe? :)
Thank you for the review.

[Corset]

who know my friend, impossible things happen all the time :)

[softlyfall]

There is seriously nothing I love more than when science becomes poetry; reason becomes nonsense; truth becomes dream; dream becomes truth; quantum refutes fact...
In that way, I gobbled this up and licked my fingers afterward...
As for the content, that whole love triangle equation I cannot relate to, though theoretically of course, I understand that it happens, and not always by design. I just would never in a million years consider cheating on my man. The last relationship I ended was due to his infidelity. I threw apples at his head and gave him a black eye. Not my fault if the fool didn't duck, right? Then I threw all of his stuff out in the snow and locked him out ...naked.
The perfect circle becoming a vortex sucking the life out of love, though..that is a very powerful allusion. Really excellent.

[David Scott]

Thank you Softy. Remind me to eat all the apples before coming to bed. Ha... A sad but of humor.

[softlyfall]

He ended up sad that is certain..he begged for months for me to take him back. Love triangles only occur when you allow them to occur, don't you think?

[David Scott]

I think life is more complicated than we can imagine. We have free will... We can use it to hurt, to heal, to forgive, to judge, etc... One thing for sure is people suffer.

[softlyfall]

I think that was the plan when we were created without wings, my friend.