If I Missed You

A longing... A heart cry.

If I missed you

 

Tactility would be numb,

feeling nothing beneath life’s nakedness;

while every brush tickles a promised caress,

flesh longing to be held

trembling in your arms.

Every morsel tasted would awaken my mouth,

watering these dry lips

confining my impatient tongue,

hungry to taste you again.

 

Fragrant, tangy bouquets might waft a memory lost

held in a subconscious void,

now piercing a vivid scent

transforming into a conscious need.

 

Music’s acoustic swing,

vibrations of sound

felt as much as heard,

could leave me quivering

as if your voice were still

a whisper in my ear.

 

Visions blinding the soul

softly bleeding colors contoured into one image;

focused on every line and curve

shadow or twinkled light,

squinting to catch a glimpse of  you.

 

I  would be a living sacrifice

undesiring of tastes or smells,

unfulfilled with sights, sound, or touch;

absent of you…

 

Your kiss would ignite the flame

consuming my soul’s poverty,

burning as incense

an offering to satisfy

the jealousy of my desire.

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

It's extremely beautiful how you sense and imagine how you'd feel if you lost the one you love, before doing so. This, to me, shows an appreciation for what you have and a gratitude in the moment. A stone in the palm of one's hand promises so much if only one would listen. Love, in the palm of your soul, is quenching. It drowns you but you are ever thirsty for more. Luxuriate in its bliss when you are able.

[David Scott]

Thank you for your thoughts here. I appreciate the review.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful words and emotion expressed in your words.
"Your kiss would ignite the flame
consuming my soul’s poverty,
burning as incense
an offering to satisfy
the jealousy of my desire."
The above perfect wish and hope. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[David Scott]

Thank you for the kind review Coyote.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome David.

[Jennesis]

So sensual and erotic. It's an interesting perspective of gratitude here, as the title says 'if i missed you'. It's like you're seeing the meaning before the loss. Sometimes in life we don't get it until they are gone.

[David Scott]

I think I like your interpretation. How we see things says more about us than what we create sometimes... Like the old ink blots... :)
Thank you for the kindness.

[...]

This erupted, then flowed, building fertile ground for your love to take root. In feeling...that's how it feels, to me. The conditions of our hearts desire appear as a question and end as a statement of mature and poetry. Loving someone else is really an act of self discovery. Example...beautiful example: "your kiss would ignite the flame Consuming my soul's poverty" . Beautiful!

[David Scott]

Thank you Lynn. The last two stanzas hit home for me too.

[BThomvanWart]

The rhythm of the poem appeared rocky to me at first, but reading through it it makes sense for it to come off as such. Longing, desire, love or lust, they're all rather rocky emotions that we all brush upon. If they were meant to be smooth and easy to deal with, then no one would write about these such things as much as they do. My favorite part about this piece is the end. It wraps up so beautifully and I got a chill from it. This is some great work, David.

[David Scott]

Thank you very much. Funny you should say the start was a bit rough. I too felt the first two stanzas especially felt awkward at best. The poem pulled itself out well as I opened up to the emotions of the write.

[BThomvanWart]

Yes, I completely agree with your statement about the poem pulling it self out well. And I definitely think, now that you say this, that opening yourself up to the emotions made it better. It's kind of like the start of the poem was your anticipation and once you felt what you wanted to express, you homed in on it and the poem filled out wonderfully. But, anyway, you're more than welcome! I'm glad I could read some of your work! :)

[Cryingkate]

You Know David, every once in a while we write something that makes us re read our own work and find layers and layers of extreme crafted work that makes us ask ourselves' Did I write that?"
Surely this must be one of those times for you.

Brilliant ! It is filled with perfect one liners. You can be very proud! Esp. On this one!

[David Scott]

Thank you "C", Kate.
Pride precedes a fall. I shall be thankful to have been gifted any inspirations. I honestly do create or discover a poem as much as I let my experiences condense into words... It's a bit like frost diamonds on the morning's glass.
Thank you once again for the kind words.

[emmajoy]

'.. softly bleeding colors contoured into one image; - focused on every line and curve - shadow or twinkled light, '

There are words that are merely constructed.. there are words that stand forever.. and they inevitably belong to lovers, to love. Because.. because, however attractively they're displayed, what shines like a beacon is the lava-hot flow.

[David Scott]

If only I missed her... ;)
Your comment is beyond appreciated. Thank you.

[David Scott]

Ah... This is one of pain's gifts I think.

[wordman]

love can move a mountain,it makes you do strange things at times
it fills your emotions,great write !

[David Scott]

Thank you for reading. I agree with your comment.

[B]

Love can make one lose everything
Literally one's sight
when you miss someone

You feel it all ..... then you give in to the feeling
feel the yearning and live with it

What else can one do

This is a stunning write

[David Scott]

I see your point. However, love really gifts all things to you. Without it, you realize you never did see before. Never did taste before, etc... Certainly we loose the poverty of our previous self, but this is no loss... Anyhow. I ramble.
Thank you kindly for your thoughts and review.

[Lily Mae]

This is a journey through every sense.. I too love the use of "consuming my soul's poverty"... Your words, your raw passion for life and love have always made me sigh...xo

[David Scott]

Hey Lily. Glad you stopped by. Thank you the kind review and I felt your sigh... It made me blush. ;)