Homecoming

A presentation of openness and welcome.

Welcome

Your pigmented glance

a vivid blush upon this page,

the poetry of your attention

 painting upon

 the ether of my soul. 

 Yet, pathetic read

 these inspirations conveying

 yearning stretched

from sunrise to sunset

fading into lavender

understanding.

Still, visions dream

 glittering tones of epiphany...

 

Can you hear... 

these petals of intention? 

Are you listening openly for

vibrations, scattering wishes;

splashing your mind's sky

with hope and love?

Wavelengths blossoming... 

cascades of fluttering waves

blending into a brilliantly

 blinding, silken starlight,

 splashed recklessly

 across midnight's suede. 

 Delicious earthy fragrance...

humming orange sensuality

begging of you,

 open the ears of your eyes

 to Gabriel's trumpet. 

Crystallized... 

this echo of an Eagle's song, 

a milky prismatic rainbow of sound

singing illuminated dreams

within the choir of Earth,

 giving azure ocean's viscous voices

 words to sing. 

Harmonies streaming... 

channel the wind's many curling rills

awakening consciousness.

 What you will see?

 What would you hear? 

This is my embrace for you... 

 Welcome

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, David!
How elegantly this is presented to the mind, heart, and soul, and your phraseology is second to none, My Friend, and it is far more impacting and easy to follow, than when read in your original format … simply lovely.
Techy stuff: (punctuation) A few less periods (stops) would produce a smoother, more continuous flow, and examine the rule for semicolons. I wonder at the word "viscous" (thick/sticky?). Your groupings are virtually spot-on in context, meaningful timbre, and emotional moment … what a way to keep and hold one's attention, just long enough to absorb and enjoy, before moving-on to the next step in your poetic journey … it really bade me enjoy the story.

Few pen more impacting Free Verse poetry, than you have here, David, and the ending is perfection at its finest.
Your skills are really dancing for us here, and I thank you ever-so gratefully for sharing this excellent piece of genuine warmth, sweet emotion, and flowing poetic beauty … it's a winner! ⁓ Richard


95/100

[David Scott]

Thank you Richard. Your advise helped me rework this a bit last night. I have been writing on my I phone and it is awkward at best for editing purposes.
Thank you for the encouraging comment. I know I am not a professional writer and it feels like a compromise every time I post, but I think I need to just get it down and out... Not sure why, but I just do. In my profession, I have to be much more exacting.
I used viscous hear to convey a fullness and thickness of the ocean's voice; as apposed to the usual fluidity of the water itself. Kind of like thick plaster becomes fluid when placed on a vibration, once lifted off the vibration of the ocean, its voice solidifies into a sort of gel in the mind of the listener. Maybe it is hard to convey every intention.
I like to think of how heavy a feather is and how light a rock is... etc...
Anyhow, I think your kindness has already paid dividends in my mind. Thank you for taking the time to actually instruct rather than pass by with a glance.
Be well.

[Richard🖌]

What a pleasure it is to join-in with you, David … thanks for including me, My Fine Friend.

[Richard🖌]

Sp: "Channel" the wind's

[David Scott]

thank you again... :/ yikes.

[Richard🖌]

Ain't it fun?

[V]

Nice choice of words, soft and lovely, sort of dreamy and harmonic read. I like how your writing guides the reader from one line to another as if following a dreamful, subtle path of your mind. It left me being peaceful and content.

[David Scott]

I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for reading.

[V]

You're welcome :)

[Corset]

"a vivid blush blush upon this page" for some reason that line is just wonderful to me, why do we assume pathetic-read, its a lovely poem with many whimsical lines any poet would and could appreciate, we write for our selves, if others do not like it..well, they don't have to read but I think you would be wrong to assume. You are a wonderful poet of full merit, IMHO, and should always stream your awakening embrace.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the empathy in your review. My intention was not to be self depreciating at all. It seems even if I can write with all elegance, the poetry is never as meaningful as the experience of human interaction. Life/Art begs to be shared. Thus, the welcome.
Thank you for coloring my day with the "blush" of your review...

[Corset]

you are welcome lol

[Rye]

Wow! this is really good, love how you have presented this with such imagery.
Detailed too, nicely written.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the energy in your review. I'm happy to know you enjoyed the poetry.

[Willard Wells]

A very powerful offer of visions of what you offer the reader with your words the opportunity to read and embrace your words. The chance to find meaning in your work and visions to their minds. As for structure etc., Richard has covered that better than most.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the comment Will. I really appreciate the energy and time Richard gave me here. He is a very giving person. Your words are encouraging.

[An owl on the moon]

This was a beautiful hymn to me of light, of vibrations calling through the universe. These words especially connected to me:

Can you hear...
these petals of intention?
Are you listening openly for
vibrations, scattering wishes;
splashing your mind's sky
with hope and love?

How intricate you weave the world through your soul's words.

[David Scott]

I am glad you read this poem. To write a poem and have it connect with another human spirit gives encouragement to me. Thank you for your kind response Craig.

[TL Boehm]

Such a lovely poem, gentle and floral - romantic but not too sweet.

[David Scott]

Thank you Tammy. You are ever welcome.

[Alisa Js]

Such beautiful writing from a lovely soul. There are those certain ones with a gift for words that ignite emotion, and you are certainly one.

Loved this.

Alisa 💫

[David Scott]

Thank you very much Alisa. I do tend to be dramatic from time to time. ha.

[Jennesis]

Sometimes I read poetry and it's hard to put together my words to submit an intelligible review. Just like in your poem's words, our senses are the ones that we use to 'get' poetry, or at least I do. I don't use the logical part of my brain, but I feel the colors here, and see the connections to heart.

~Jenn

[David Scott]

What a thoughtful review. Thank you Jen. This poem was penned after some very profound mediation... It was truly a gift handed to my soul. I had to share it.

[Jennesis]

Sounds like a perfect way to write!

[Great Aunt Astri]

I would love to hear this read by you on a stage! Wonderful!

[David Scott]

Thank you for comment. I have had stage fright the last few years... There was a time.