A Whispered Breath

Reflections of passion in a quiet voice...

In the endless void of all beginning...

The Spirit breathed ~

Across the vastness of unmade galaxies

there was a still, small voice.

I, made in the same image

raise my voice

breathing my whisper

warm upon an unmade love. 

Do you answer my call?

 

Doing thus, would we be reborn? 

Now, flesh of my flesh

as one, bone of my bone 

all our desires melting,

gathered in the clutches of satisfaction

blissful pleasure is ours.

Not of my creation,

lest I appear to boast, Bounteous joys freely gifted.

Should we claim ownership? 

Are we full of such greedy audacity? 

Though I hunt the deer upon my land

consuming what I claim is mine 

we both return to dust, 

this living land remains the basket of our passing. 

If the flesh passes not beyond the veil, 

what does it profit to preserve purity? 

There can be no blasphemy in pleasure.

Neither is there vanity nurturing passion. 

Doth human legacy not ride the crest of passion's waves? 

Do we not collect our lives upon time's sand spilled shore? 

We need not shout our rage

striving to live beyond fate's shadow.

Expect not loud beating drums or bugled songs

heralding our arrival and all to soon departure.

Listen to the quiet pulse...

Two hearts echoing a whispered legacy ~

Exhaled upon spent, flushing flesh 

Fulfilled in the climax of our love.

Author's Note

These are a few thoughts I recorded on my I phone on my drive home from work last night... I hope my words can inspire others to embrace and live their passions, breathing in the whispers of love in their lives.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. A sensitive journey in thoughts and words leading to a good ending.
"Listen to the quiet pulse,
Two hearts echoing a whispered legacy,
Exhaled upon spent, flushing flesh,
Fulfilled in the climax of our love. "
A wise person does listen to heart and the mind. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[David Scott]

Thank you for your kind comment.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome David.

[Cryingkate]

Oh David,
I've not spent much time here this year and when I am I hven't been able to get back with everyone at once.
I'm so glad I caught this. It is esp. Beautiful. And said so well with fresh new lines I love the fresh take on probably a very old experience for the human race.

Awesome ! Yes indeed glad I caught this.

[David Scott]

Thank you for your generosity Kate. I've been away myself. I hope all is well with you.

[Cryingkate]

All Is well here too Scott, I'm glad to know you've been away too. I felt bad when I realized I haven't been paying you attention for such a long spell. That explains it :-)
Keep up the Great Writing.....!

[David Scott]

no worries at all

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Sacred sighs have been breathed into your pen and spilled upon the page. This is so soul-fulfilling that it breathes of life. Great write. Truly.

[David Scott]

I'm honored. Thank you. Yes, blessings given and simply shared.

[s y e]

I haven't reviewed anything on here for a couple of months, I think so I'll be a little rusty, please forgive me. :)

This is such an inspirational write, Pasta Man. I loved this little hushed write, definitely not a whisper though as it's going to mean something to everyone who reads it. I'll definitely be passing this message around!

Hope all is well with you it's been a while. Miss ya!

[David Scott]

Thank you for such a kind review Sye.
My soul will be fed and filled for days on the Noodlelishiousness of your feedback.
😀
All is well. Recovering with vigor from my latest spine surgery...

[Sami Khalil]

This is absolutely whispered wisdom in love and passion with the genesis of the first thoughts and desires. The union that turns into a holy covenant to live beyond the dust of time and bodies. An excellent comeback Poem.....:).......

[David Scott]

Thank you Sami. You are always generous with your words.
This is an old write. I still have not found my it in my heart to create anything new... Some day.😀
I enjoyed your poetry as water brings joy to the thirsty.

[Sami Khalil]

Same here. You Will. A talent lives on in the heart and mind of the talented deep in the soul. You are welcome muchly. ....:).......

[An owl on the moon]

What profound whispers.. the sacred and soft sounds of life... the Ancient One awakening thoughts across time and space... you explore so deeply the places that we dwell... the voices that speak into our lives...

[David Scott]

Thank you Craig. You are wise to listen for the " Ancient One " as this is the only source of true wisdom we can seek to mirror as poets.

[Chris]

So many quests and questions... do we make them, live them, seek them, ask them? Do we actually pause long enough over them to make them real? So many inherencies so little time.

[David Scott]

Ha... Yes Chris, I for one make it real; even when it would be more prudent to be plastic.
I like your reflection and mirrored questioning of this thought.
Thank you for reading.

[Zahra]

vastness of unmade galaxies, amazing metaphor. A deep, though provoking poem. Well penned

[David Scott]

Thank you Zahra. I may be "full of it ", but it always seems to be deep. Ha. ;). I am trying to lighten up.

[B.J]

An exciting poem full of depth and vivid imagery. Beautiful words.

[David Scott]

Thank you BJ. I hv been recovering from surgery so I apologize for my late response.

[B.J]

not a problem I've been slipping a bit lately also with stuff that is needing doing and submitting some of my work also reviewing others.

[asdarkeyesclose]

'We need not shout our rage,
Striving to live beyond fate's shadow,'

this is a very tender, sensitive poem. i liked the contrasts between shouting and whispering- they were used to great effect. i have never written a poem out loud, may be I should try it! fantastic.

[David Scott]

Thank you dark eye. I composed it in my car, so I had no choice... :)