I am Your Whisper

The magic of listening and being heard.

I am the whisper

others do not hear.

They only see the beast tamed,

applauding a dancing coordination.

 Ah, but this animal is not tame;

a bestial heart pumps within.

Protecting with a ferociousness

you only experience in our love.

 At first I am only

 the tickle of a gentle breeze,

tempestuously rising

 in the passion of you.

We ride the Elysium fields,

while mortal creatures sleep.

Wild

I am collared,

captured by your listening ear.

Within you, this whisper stirs

a vibration of harmonic pulse

until the sky is split.

Torrential is the song of our union,

raining until the cloud is spent,

I hover within you,

a foggy melody of recognition.

 Your lips kiss me good morning

as I slip past your tongue,

I am

your breath of life;

your whisper.

 

Reviews

[Blue]

I love the last three lines, David. They made me think of a lover. Overall, you have written an eloquent and excellent poem that gives a powerful message to everyone. I like your wordplay. Well done!

[David Scott]

Thank you Arzel. You are very kind.
I felt the last lines were given to me rather than me trying to find the words. Often, this is what happens when I write poetry. I start with a feeling and try to put it into words and then words seem to show up giving me a new feeling... The last few lines show up as I finally internalize my own writing.

[Horizon K.]

This is not the kind of whisper that should be ignored, this wildness inside, seeking allowance to unleash and take, the controlled and uncontrolled ride. Don't hold back, the passion... Very cool, the reader could allow this to mean whatever passion, desire, that is just under the skin, wanting to be set loose...

[David Scott]

Thank you Horizon.
I did like how this poem rounded out to give the reader power and ownership of the "whisper "...
Honestly, I just started writing a thought and the poem led me to its own conclusion. ;) Kind of like my own little whisper needing to be expressed...
I like you review very much. Thank you once again for your friendship and kindness to me.

[Cryingkate]

Oohhh Scott , You gave me goose pimples that tickle. I still have them. I'm about to need a houserobe ...Oh Oh I just tore two holes in my blouse.... :-)

[David Scott]

Ha ha... You have me laughing now. Sorry about the blouse. :)
Thank you for reading and for a rather energetic review.

[Cryingkate]

Hey, I had to revenge... tit 4 tat :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the last three lines...

all of this is powerful...love can make us feel like a wild animal that is sometimes tame but other times uncontrollable ..love can do that.

love how this goes in and out of fierceness and a docile state.

[David Scott]

Thank you Jacob. I agree the last few lines were the strongest. I need to revise the beginning and the middle a little bit I think. I too often rush to finish a thought and share it... Most of my poetry is raw inspiration with very little refinement.
Thank you for your kind support professor. :)

[LadyAnn68]

A whisper on the pillow...this is truly beautiful...I applaud you! Terrific imagery...excellent write!

[David Scott]

Thank you kindly for the review and the applause. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The volume of our words doesn't matter, those who care about us will hear even the faintest of our thoughts, hopes and desires.

[David Scott]

Thank you Dale. I think you make a great point. I like how you said this so plain and simple.
Thank you for the review.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I just call em as I see em… you are welcome.

[Frieda P]

Wow Scott, this is really outstanding, I adore it first word to last, it's edgy and stirring, and seriously affecting. You did split the sky with this one my friend.

[David Scott]

Yeah! Now lets go play in the puddles! ;)
I couldn't resist.
Thank you sweetums. xo.

[Frieda P]

Ready when you are, we can dance in them right?
Splish splash....you're the best! ;-) xo

[Jack...]

Now this is one beautiful piece of poetry my friend. This entire work was soft as a whisper but spoke volumes from the heart.

Loved, "A vibration in harmonic pulse"

This read extremely smoothly and had a very comforting feel to it. Very nice David.

[David Scott]

Good evening Jack. Yes, just a thought I have been forming since lunchtime today... I had to get out a few third molars before I could pen this and get it out of my head... Ha.
Thank you for reading and commenting Jack.

[Jack...]

So what you are saying is, inflicting pain inspires you? :)