Wintershade

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Wintershade haunts me.

I fear the days when I am happy,

With only the company of the cat.

I fear the cold stillness of winter,

 

Where only the dryness of the crackling fire

Radiates her song, devoid of form…

So, for now, I will enjoy

Honking geese, as they mock

My inability to migrate.

I will enjoy the restlessness of fall.

 

Half bare limbs, fence with stately poise,

The rushing thrusts of autumn...

 

Rejoice with me.

Today, the dog is still alive.

Besides, when there is only a wintershade,

Contently stroking the purring of sleeping desire,

 

Who I am will have followed the baying hound,

Beyond the chill of the rocking chair…

Reviews

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This reads beautifully, to me, as |there is a time for everything" The emotional seasons of life and living it. May be strange, but I find it quite soothing, my friend. Another wonderful display of artistry, David :)

[David Scott]

Thank you Lynn. I was at peace when I wrote this. A deep sadness was upon me but not asulting or depressing me. I do think you got the emotion.

[Roland Petrov]

You always seem to have memorable lines in your poems, and a prime example here is "I will enjoy honking geese as they mock my inability to migrate". Love it! I also like the style here; it's a beautiful autumnal poem without excess sentimentality.

[David Scott]

Ah... You call me back to a melancholy day with this review. Thank you for the kind words.
Still, I did not feel anger or resentment upon the passing season, only a wistful understanding beyond a time of usefulness... Still, there is a purpose.

[Nautili]

I like the feeling evoked from this, that although winter looms on the horizon, you will enjoy the quickly passing Autumn.
" Besides, when there is only a wintershade,
Contently stroking the purring of sleeping desire."
I felt this line was not complete, until I read it with a comma at the end of "desire", instead of a period-then the ending flowed better. Regardless, I enjoyed it.

[David Scott]

Thank you Nautili. I agree with you. An obvious mistake I overlooked. It is nice to actually get helpful advice. :)
I am happy you still enjoyed the work. I was feeling this write deeply.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The intense imagery and subtle emotion evoke a ritual of desire, well done, good read.

[David Scott]

Thank you Tom. I did try to keep my emotions "in check" a little here. I wanted to convey depth without over dramatizing the emotion. I think Winter is like this... hidden depths and quietness.

[NeiL ArandA]

You write with such passion and intensity. Could it be just seasonal depression ? As it comes in dreary days.

[David Scott]

Ha... Thank you again. I do write with my heart.
Thankfully I was not feeling depressed at all. I was feeling reflective. I was feeling the reality of seasons in life. Mostly, I was feeling like my soul will always find a song to howl and a hunt to chase. Even in the fearful face of death.
I have known depression however.
Thank you for reading Neil.

[NeiL ArandA]

You're welcome... David..I enjoyed every bit of it...

[Quill~]

Lovely brushstrokes... "Rejoice"....live in the moment. :)

[David Scott]

Shall I paint you a picture or sing you a song? Both require breath...
Thank you dear friend.

[Quill~]

:) send me to the clouds....write me poem....
that would surely leave me breathless...
You're welcome. :)

[Quill~]

:) I love the poem!!!!...it's lovely in the clouds...

[Quill~]

Thank you for writing it for me. ~~~~~*.*~~~~~

[David Scott]

Indeed my friend. Consider I have a positive intent and I do care for all my friends as well as my own heart. Trust I have no ill intent. Please.
I have no intent to lie to anyone.
Simply choosing a little privacy. Even if privacy is a little out if character. :)
You know me better than to assume ill of me.

[Relic]

You have really chosen your words with care in this and it shows. "With only company of the cat" has a lonely interpretation about it as it relates to the poem. A fine job on this one David.

[David Scott]

Thank you Relic.
I see my father and even myself becoming satisfied with life even when the doggish energy of life has run off... It is well and good to learn this satisfaction as life and our physical bodies change. It is still frightening as hell! ha.
It is not really about being alone as much as loosing "something" in the never to be revisited past. I'm glad you picked up on the significance of the line however. It was one of the more meaningful concepts of this poem to me and one few have commented on.

[MsJewel]

Wintershade haunts me - You had me with the first line - being a summer girl myself -
You have described the silent chill of the changing season so well. Your words are so soft - almost haunting. A beautifully descriptive piece.

:) Julie

[David Scott]

Hello Julie,

Thank you for reading and leaving a review reflective of your true response to the poetry.
I did feel a chill in my soul as I wrote this.

[Joiedevivre]

evocative allegory of time passing in the day, in the year and in one's life. We must enjoy the moments and let anticipation lie still, I rejoice here with you under the earthy wonders of the changing leaves and migrating geese!

[David Scott]

Thank you for experiencing the poetry with the season. Beyond time, I do feel my spirit will be returned to the freedom and wildness of the "hunt".
Your review was a kind gift while the chair still rocks... ;)

[joshua deathdealer]

This is splendid and humorous. Great depth and emotions to match.

[David Scott]

Thank you for reading Joshua.
Every dog has his day... :)