3:00AM series: intruder beware.

3:00AM series: intruder beware.

A Story by David Scott
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Not what you think. (Yes, the titled changed) Part of short story series about 3:00AM.

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The gun was in the mop closet. Antique wood and twisted metal lay hidden on a shelf six feet high. The ammunition was stored across the laundry room, in a cabinet above the washing machine.
              

Before last night, the gun had only been used to shoot the soda cans my son and I would hang in the trees down by the French Broad River.  Last night, the mechanism designed to direct explosive destruction was tried and true to its purpose.
              

            There is something magical about 3:00AM. The crickets and frogs seem to have tired by this time of night.  Their ancient harmonies drift beyond the murmuring of the river.  The coyotes have stopped yapping over their kill and the owls sit with wide eyed satisfaction of the night’s hunt.  Stirring from their slumbers, scavengers are becoming bold enough to leave their hiding places. Domestic cats are mewling and dogs are whining to be let outside. Tired housewives nudge their husbands awake to accommodate these nocturnal demands.  Yes, 3:00AM is magical.
            

 Sometimes the magic is sensual, playful, and creative.  Lovers fall into bed after a night out on the town. Maybe they find their bodies intertwined and wake up to enjoy mingling shared dreams with realities felt in their flesh.  Campers turn on their flashlights to tell ghost stories and share secret thoughts with restless friends.  Poets construct sculptured lines from their unquiet imaginations as intricate and delicate as a spider’s web and as bold and billowing as an afternoon thunder head expanding into the blue sky of spring.

 Other times, the magic is mystical.  Orbs of golden light can be seen floating between the sentinel trunks of the hardwoods surrounding Brown Mountain.   Blue glow worms blanket the leafy carpet of the laurel thickets imitating fey.  Meteor showers visit our skies from time to time casting a magical spell in the darkest hours of the night. Twinkling stars dance around the steady gleam of planets mirroring the Sun’s radiant light while hidden, safely tucked behind the skirts of Mother Earth.


               3:00AM magic can also birth dark and sinister.  Last call at Dugan's Pub has the patrons trying to sober up as they stumble off into the early morning hours.  Fate hangs by the wobbly thread of drunken reason, guided to the mouth of undefined need like a spent cigarette held between unsteady fingers.   Thieves destroy years of hard work in moments.  Drug hazed, addiction fed, desperate disregard of others property and safety finds boldness in these dark moments.  Evil is wide awake and lurking in the shadows.  Unexplained noises crash into the solace of a restful night’s sleep.  The world, like a Waffle House pancake, is flipped into the shocking heat of a grim reality.

                Last night, when 3:00AM dragged itself into my semi-conscious mind, I was alone.  My wife, my children, and our dogs were spending the night at the lake house.  I was to join them today after the work week was finished.  The evening hours had been quiet and relaxing without the demands a house full of people can project.  Comedies and dramas on the television had blinked their last flash of distraction a few hours ago.  I was finally settled and still.  Deep and restful sleep had come to me after my ritualistic tossing an turning from one unsatisfactory position to another.   

                Blurry numbers on the bed side clock seemed to radiate a red warning.  I stretched my eyebrows higher to force my eyes to open and focus.  Then, with a suddenness that caught my breath, I was instantly alert.  More alert than if I had showered and sipped down two cups of coffee.  My mind was racing, frantic to catch up with my reflexes.  I glanced over at the clock again to confirm the time was indeed 3:11AM.  Then I heard a distinct collection of noises I could easily identify were originating from my garage.  I could not tell exactly what was going on, but I knew I was no longer alone in my house.

                It was not the first time our house had been invaded.  It had happened twice before.  The last time, our family had been away on vacation and the bandits had enjoyed the opportunity make themselves at home.  They even destroyed the garage and damaged our cars.  I guessed last night they thought the house was empty again because the family car was gone and no dogs were barking at their approach. I decided last night was going to be the last time they visited my home. 

                Without turning on any lights, I made my way silently to the laundry room and recovered the weapon hidden in the mop closet.   I had not bothered to get dressed and I felt a moment of self-conscious embarrassment as I crouched low loading ammunition into the gun.  Calvin Kline boxer briefs did not exactly create a secure wardrobe for confronting intruders.  

                Carefully I chambered the first found.  My finger was trembling as I toggle the weapon’s safety lever.  Red paint indicated the trigger was active and ready to fire, lacking only the gentle squeeze I had practiced while firing at the cans by the river.  I flung the door open and flipped on the garage lights with one swift motion.  My eye caught the movement of two separate forms.  One intruder was gone in a flash.  His survival instinct was reflexive and lighting quick.  I knew he had escaped.  The other intruder was slower to respond and had hidden behind the plastic organizers standing along the garage wall. I yelled a warning and tried to frighten the intruder away.   I got no response other than the eerie sound of his breathing.   I called out again in an attempt to force him to run off.  Still, I achieved no response.  So, I aimed my weapon at the plastic door and unloaded the clip of ammunition with a steady hand.

                I saw the bloody splatter on the wall and I knew I had aimed true.  The once quiet breathing was now a loud, gruesome and desperate gasping.  One long exhale told me the spirit had left the body of my victim.  My heart was pounding even though the adrenaline had left my veins.  I felt the chill of the night air as I stood alone in my garage,  holding a gun, while wearing only my underwear. 

                Cautiously I approached the destroyed storage container.  My shots had riddled the thin plastic with gaping holes.  I had the presence of mind to put on my leather yard gloves as I began the messy process of removing the body and cleaning the blood off the walls and floor. Finally, I hung the dead intruder on a tree in the back yard before going inside to clean up and try to get some rest before the morning alarm demanded my attention. 

                To be honest, I do feel a little guilty for killing the raccoon, but if the other one comes back, I’ll make a hat out of him as well.  Who knew coonskin hats were a product of the magic surrounding  3:00AM?

© 2013 David Scott


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Wow! Amazing luring the reader in, seeping into the mind the want to know more... Made this a quick read as suspense kept the imagination on toes ready to spring like our first Lucky Coon.
Great Story Buddy!

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Did you mean to say you could see me writing a book one day?
Maybe? Hmmm.
Priscilla Sayers

11 Years Ago

No I say write it today!:)
 David Scott

11 Years Ago

HA... Ok, right after I finish this root canal procedure. ;)
This is an entertaining read. I like the twist at the end. Very well written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the read and review.
Well, not the ending that I expected..My husband, son-in-law and grandsons have to go armadillo hunting on occasion..Enjoyed reading this one that is lavish in descriptiveness, creativeness, and expresseiveness..An imagination to lurk the reader into tale with an unusual ending..Thanks for the visits to my page..Your comments were uplifting..Sara

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading.
Just a bit of creative storytelling...
I don't hunt actually. N.. read more
I was in suspense till the end when a big smile was on the face when the story turned out that way. I love all the beautiful imagery you have painted about the 3 AM hour. A master of poetry is now a master of story-telling...Bravo

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Sami.
I'm thankful for your support and compliment, but I am not a mast.. read more
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

So true and well spoken. You are welcome...:)
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

^^~^^ :)...........
So, midnight is the witching hour, but 3:00am is the coonskin cap hour... :) A great story, so well written! Very enjoyable, David.

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Thank for the read Rita.
I am going to write this story from the perspective of the racoon ne.. read more
I never saw that one coming. I was truly engrossed in the story and the descriptions right until the very last punctuation mark. Nice twist at the end. You are a consummate story teller!

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

I'm so glad I did not give it away too soon.
I like telling stories. It is fun for me and mor.. read more
Ooooft, Pasta man showing your haunting side! I loved this. I loved the imagery here. The way you described it, too. You're an excellent storyteller.

3:00AM is when all the magical things happen, lmao.

Very nicely done David!

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Tada! I secretly a serial raccoon killer.... Run!!! Ha.
I don't think raccoon make good noo.. read more
s y e

11 Years Ago

Raccoons would make Noodle soup go off. LOL!
An imaginative thriller with a surprise turn of events to finish, 3:00am is indeed a magical, wondrous time!

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading this Tom.
Can you believe this is almost a true story...? ha. :)
Good story Scott. I thought the writing was well done with the nice touch on the ending. Even after hanging the intruder in the backyard, I was still wondering what it is actually hanging out there until the very end.

Your reference to 3am was very well done as many things are going on at that hour in private. It indicates you've written poetry as it comes out in the phrasing and the images spoken.

Also the image of trying to confront an intruder in boxer shorts puts the reader in your position. I personally would not want to be in that position and you did a nice job showing the nervous energy felt.

Well done Scott.

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Thank you Baily.
I am so glad you felt the discomfort. The whole situation was uncomfortable.. read more
Haha! Surprise ending! Until the raccoon reveal I thought, wow, totally psycho to hang him on the tree! Anyway... It's fun to see you writing stories! I don't know if you have written before, but really well described! I loved the paragraphs about 3am being a time of magic and mystic and sinister. Technically, I would have to give this piece more thought as to the effectiveness of the different vibes you were sending, from the backflash-intro into those pensive poetic moments, then to a bloody surprise ending... Definitely strong on the poetic descriptive elements, but thinner on characterization, asi try to figure out this person who at first appears to be in those peaceful moments of mid-night questioning into this violent vengeful man who unloads a round on a raccoon... Loving or hating nature... A man of peace or war, or just... A complicated man... Ok, thinking... Fun piece Scott!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Because there are raccoons crashing around in my garage... duh... ;)
Oh, and cats biting my .. read more
Horizon K.

11 Years Ago

Wow that's a lot going on! Hope it's not insomnia! But yeah, a book or collection of stories would.. read more
 David Scott

11 Years Ago

;)
I actually sleep great.
You know I am kidding and I have a flare for exaggeration and.. read more

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