Drifting Blue

self-portrait

Cast dispersions on my sanity

Who’s the wiser, the smarter

If you think your brain’s a temple

And mine’s a coal mine

You ain’t wrong, you might be right

 

I went astray in the last second before the big bang

And lost the light of my star

Midst the overwhelming helium cloud

The ever rising pyre of the eagle nebula

And you call my life a black hole

You ain’t wrong, you might be right

 

Figure out my mood, read the tea leaves, the dregs

All of life is found in the waste and waste runs the show

The effort of the undertow is gravity’s last word

The last train out of town, the end of the line

The place where my yes means yes and no means no

And still you see me unable to make a choice

You ain’t wrong, you might be right

 

Walking the halls in this tin can mansion

Staring at the stairs unable to climb

Ripped shirt and low heeled boot tat tat

And you call me out so that I might be saved

But you find the disappointment of another feint, slight of hand

You ain’t wrong, you might be right

 

So the stillness belies the silent clown

Living in his own mess, his haunted box

Where the street lights cast shadows over the night space

That I inhabit and bid you come

You say no thanks, there’s demons in there

You ain’t wrong, you might be right.

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

This is seriously art in text. Loved this masterpiece you've got here; it's very descriptive and your choice of words are very entertaining.

I think the second stanza is my favorite. All of the figurative language used there was freakin' awesome! I don't know why, but I've always been a sucker for the description of the universe even it's used for similes or metaphors.

It's really clever how you described yourself in this piece. It's pretty difficult for someone to do that as thoroughly as this. So, great job! I enjoyed reading this. It's got a nice Dark side to it.

Ironically Yours. Blade and Blood

[Emily B]

Brilliant words, remind me of some other someone Blue who used to wander here.

[C. Harter Amos]

This one is my favorite of the pieces you've posted here. The single-edged hinge you hang at the end of each line makes me smile; "You ain't wrong, you might be right". It reminds me of the song "you might be wrong, but you might be right". As a "self portrait" I think it does a better job of telling us who you are than you might think. It's brilliant writing. Thank you for giving such writing to those hungry for it.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Excellent flow, your choice of words are strong and the subject is deep. Good write.

[Legion]

Brilliant anthem. Well done. Love the repetition of the last line to bring it all home. Excellently worded.