The Unfeeling Kiss

 

The music plays softly.

The reverberating notes

Echo across the crowded room,

Cutting into the silence between the couple

At table six, touching their hearts

In a way that nothing else can.

They sit,

Eating their plate of spaghetti

(A subconscious attempt

To reach the happiness seen

In the movie of their childhood,

Lady and the Tramp).

Except unlike in the movies

Their kiss is completely unfeeling,

Devoid of love.

 

They both dance

In their masquerade

Their masks of romance

Hiding their true feelings

(Or rather, their lack of such emotions).

 

Caught in a waltz,

Stepping to the beat

Of Insincerity and Dishonesty,

Twirling around the floor

In shoes filled with Deceit and Corruption,

Spinning with the pretense of love,

The façade of tenderness and passion,

Spiraling

Out of all control.

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

I think I know these people...well at least I've seen people like that who seem to be acting out their relationship when they go out. I'm usually pretty good at seeing through things like that. Maybe it's not even that I'm perceptive, but that such phoniness isn't really that hard to spot. There is a desperation to it and you really describe that mix of phoniness and desperation so well in this. The sad thing is that they think they're fooling anyone...they're deluding themselves and who knows how long they will continue just like that. So in the end this is a tragedy of the worst kind. The participants are willing.

You did a great job here :)

[Amanda Crandall]

I found this poem to be very sad. the imagery is excellent, almost like prose. Keep it up

I enjoy the dance reference a whole bunch. (Go figure) I think it follows the story very well.

I kinda wonder what it would be like if it wasn't a poem, but a story.

But I love it all the same.

[Andromeda]

fantastic!!! i especially love the Lady and the Tramp tidbit, cause that movie's awesome! hahah, you need to put more poems on here cause they're always fantastico!