Dorothy's Depressed

I don't even know anymore

I'll spin, spin, spin around 

In this tornado you constructed

Out of my bones and blood

Memories and emotions

Land me in a sea of delirium

Constant torture, your sudden whim

When did it change?

Solid love to liquid hate?

But I'll just trail down this bloody yellow brick road

With myself in mind

Not you

Not you

Not anymore

Blood of Courage,

Heart of tin

Water witches

and scarecrow skin 

Maybe if I tap my crimson slippers together once more,
I'll wake up 
wake up
From this terrible nightmare.
Help me wake up.

Reviews

[Patrick O'Neil]

Wow, this one has great rhythm and rhyme and the word combination just brilliant:
"Blood of Courage,
Heart of tin
Water witches
and scarecrow skin"

Hang in there Wonderland, with talent like you have, things will swing your way soon. Just be sure to believe and you will receive.

[Graveyardfuck]

Thank you so much

[Kai Rollins]

Not you. Not anymore. I also liked the rhythm of that. It stirs you up inside. Brilliant :3

[Relic]

Wow, lots of depth to this and great choice of words. Nice job.

[Blue Belle]

I love the reference to the Wizard of Oz. It's a really neat poem and I really love the forth stanza.

[Simon Welsh]

Beautifully written. Would make a good story on its merit. Nice.

[Haley Harrigan]

Hey, Brooke! I love this! I picture it as how a Grimm's Fairytale would be in poetry form! I loved it!!!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Hey, Brooke! :) I hate it when my efforts to comment are destroyed by this f***ing site's for-sh*t editor. You'll just have to use your imagination. It was all about creativity and creative style - biblical versus derivative. I admonished you to contemplate both and to begin to review other peoples works; in order to help you become a better writer. (sniff, snoot) Then I wrote something arrogant and snotty and quippy - as a final zinger - I think that's when the WC gods decided they'd had enough and decided my miniscule rant merited summary destruction. Sometimes the "Save Comment" is more like a "Banish This Crap Review To Hell" button.

100 screaming, clacking keyboard-damning demons

[Graveyardfuck]

Lol I only got fragments of that but thank you

[MichaelsLyric.com]

The oz turned dark. I like it. This is very creative. Nice write.

[Graveyardfuck]

Thank you :D