Cinematic Gold

I hate you.

 

So much more, so much more then I used to.

You never learned, darling you never learned,

 

You'll never learn.

I'll sit back and watch this cinematic moment pass,

Hold on tight and enjoy the ride,

Let karma envelop your static choice,

With retrospective eyes I will see,

What you have become and soon will be.
...

And I will enjoy

every

 

 

moment

 

 with a tortured stare.

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

in the second line i think you mean to say "so much more than..." as opposed to "then"

other than that super minor error, this piece was great! i could feel the tension and the painful satire in watching this person suffer as they yearn to have the subject back. it gave off a dark vibe of "it's just too late" great work!

[Luke Rawlings]

I loved this piece. Simple and effective. Well done :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Wow… this is fantastic!

Brilliant imagery and great transitions!

[LadySoDivine]

Love this piece! It's full of anger and resentment for the person that's done you wrong. It's strong nad powerful and it grips the attention of the reader. Well done!

[Patrick O'Neil]

Wow,, gripping stuff hate to be on your bad said.. lol. Good write.

[LaVonneTheLovely]

Oh I love this. chilling, and a nice use of repetition!

[Lexi Richard]

Something about this is so enthralling. . . Gives me goosebumps

[eglantine]

Lots of talk about this moment, but what is this moment? I'd love to see some great imagery describing the moment. Thanks for sharing.

[Simon Welsh]

Oh wow, this poem shows growth! Kudos.

[Keith LaFountaine]

Great imagery in this. I feel like the flow could be worked on (meaning just like the progression and length of some of your lines), but otherwise this is a great piece! Good work!