This is a haunting piece of poetry. I sympathize with your inspiration here, and I believe you married skill and substance wonderfully. I wish I hadn't read it; I know these words too well, many of them I've thought myself, and remembering what I'd hope to forget is painful.
But there's no denying that you did very well, Wonderland, and that your ability is formidable. I hope you continue to write, as I expect to return and read all of your work, and I sincerely hope whatever's broken your heart has been undone.
very well written, again you have been able to move me with the emotion and tone that you have managed to somehow perfect. keep up the good work and i will keep watching for another great poem
ah don't we all get into this gloomy mood when someone is happy and it's not because of us? great job. coincidentally i read this while listening to "heaven knows i'm miserable now" by the smiths and it fit very nicely! my only constructive criticism would be not to use black as an adjective to describe sorrow because it's a bit of a cliche. other than that- great write and i hope you feel better!
This is a haunting piece of poetry. I sympathize with your inspiration here, and I believe you married skill and substance wonderfully. I wish I hadn't read it; I know these words too well, many of them I've thought myself, and remembering what I'd hope to forget is painful.
But there's no denying that you did very well, Wonderland, and that your ability is formidable. I hope you continue to write, as I expect to return and read all of your work, and I sincerely hope whatever's broken your heart has been undone.
dude totally like this one... I like the whole sigh deal going on- and I like how your poems in general seem to be quite relatable to people- including myself...
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Speculate over my alluring, yet ominous creations.
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