Dear Timothy

Dear Timothy, 

This is a letter I will never send to you.

But I just wanted to say,

That once again,

I found a love,

That I may have lost.

It's you.

It's you...

Resist.

I told myself.

Yet, obedience is a struggle for a stubborn girl.

Unless it's you I obey.

My King.

My every thing.

You showed me things.

Sins.

In those innocent browns of yours.

A smile so bright, how could you ever resist?

Now I lay here, accumulating to the stench of weed.

And cigarettes.

Unfamiliar smells and emotions.

Yet one remains nuetral.

Love.

I can feel it.

Pulsing through me like the drop in dubstep.

I wasn't anticipating this.

This intoxicating rush I get when I'm around you.

Do you feel the same?

Or are you just another lying heart breaker?

I...

I cannot help but risk it.

I give into temptation,

The smoke swirling around us,

As I feel more than one high spike through my veins.

I'm risking it.

Again.

                                                                                      Sincerely,

                                                                                      Brooke

Author's Note

Was listening to Third Realm while I wrote this.

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

lieing is misspelled and should be lying! i think the dubstep music reference sort of comes out of nowhere, if it's supposed to be an odd comparison you can totally make it work! but it stands out from the rest of the poem because it quickly juxtaposes a lot of general ideas with a randomly specific comparison. i did very much enjoy reading this and can relate to the situation completely. it's also cool how you used the center justification to shape the contour of the poem and it helps it to ebb and flow really really nicely. great work!

[Lexi Richard]

I love all the visuals and the emotion in this. I'm sure many people can relate to this, as did I.

[Luke Rawlings]

Really good writing, well done. Imagery, structure and overall story captivated me to the very end. Bravo! :D

[Shelley Wollstonecraft]

amazing, emotional, very good :D

best wishes

[Helene K. S. Jensen]

I found the rhythm kind of off, but apart from that and the spelling mistakes, this is a great piece of writing. Very emotional with the inner conflict.

[Simon Welsh]

Love is Hell. Sometimes, we can do better without.

[chaotic katie]

another lovely piece fantastic job