Blue Eyed Liar

Short but I think it's pretty to the point.

Crystal blue,

Crimson red,

Bleeding lines in the lies you've said.

You're a cold hearted soul,

And I'm not quite sure what to make of it,

My thoughts swarm with all the happiness you've bit...

Off of me.

Break off another chunk, why don't you?

I see temptation in those blues of yours.

Might it be lust, too?

Ruin another wrist, darling,

Every time you make another mistake,

"You never learned" I say,

"You never learned" I say.

So play another melancholy berceuse,

And stare at your ugly scars,

And remember all the lifes you've ruined,

And the friendship that was once ours.

Crystal blue lies,

Disguised within your eyes.

Blood bleeding red,

Every time you invite another stranger in bed...

Reviews

[JulieÉmile]

You've conveyed some pretty strong feelings here. Makes we wonder what you were going through while writing this. This is good work. Well written and constructed in a way that it pulls the reader out of a comfort zone and gives a violent shake. Thank you for sharing this.

[K.S.78]

Another very strong piece! I like how the first stanza and the last are similar without being exact. Very unique!

[LadySoDivine]

Really great poem. And you're right, it's straight to the point. I love the rhymes you used and it flows nicely. :) Anger can be consuming though, so be careful. But all in all, amazing job!

[Simon Welsh]

Anger is a brutal thing. Not bad.

[quinfinn]

this feels like the author of the write was addressing themselves , utterly poignant and devastating words to direct inward. well penned!

[Darian Justine]

Its the poems like this that make me love your work. You use great detail and they all flow really nicely. "off of me" kinda got my reading out of rhythm a little bit, though! But maybe thats just me lol.
Really powerful, amazing work.