Diary of a Zombie

A little poem a wrote in the view of puzzled zombie a while back.

The backbeat of the soundtrack staggers,

Slower than a heartbeat.

My head slumps to the side,

And my arms reach out in front of me.

I vacillate, unsure how to walk.

My baby doe-like legs move onward to the backbeat,

Towards my terrified victim, I go.

Drool spews from my mouth uncontrollably.

So…

Hungry…

I snatch at my victim, and dig my dirty fingers into her flesh.

Blood… Vital organs…

Mmmm…

I reach for her heart,

AND YANK.

A moan escapes from my bloody lips.

Oh, what a mess I have made, now.

But this isn’t right…

I can no longer compute normal human thoughts.

What are those again?

I cannot control myself.

Must…

Have…

More…

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

i think in the section where your zombie character begins to second guess themselves, you could make that more powerful... i don't think a zombie would consciously think "i can't process human thoughts." those thoughts would be a distant flickering, nagging at them to put the human heart down...but they can't and the flickering disappears and they're blood thirsty and cold and that's all they can feel. just something more powerful. other than that, i love how you travel into very daring topics of writing and i really enjoyed this-great work!

[KayK143]

Awesome xD

[Rahul]

you got me by this write.

[Account Closed]

I love how different this is! Your use of a creature like a zombie is great! Keep up the good work!

[Roxii]

This is very interesting.! I love it.! :D

[Billy Sullivant]

I dig this poem.

[Kenneth Stephen Goodpas..]

This was absolutely entertaining and adorable. I recommend changing the font though. I had to strain my eyes to read.

[chaotic katie]

ZOMBIES! apocolyptically awesome! nice job!

[The Girl That Let You G..]

Disgustingly awesomly brilliant. Nice one

[Divyanshu Kachhap]

Nicely written and well explained but the fonts are eye aching ... i have to zoom the screen and read it !! overall the poem is nice :)